Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-09-17
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
Nowadays many large international companies offer their staff the opportunity to spend a period of time living and working in another country.
Why might this opportunity be good for employees?
What advantages does this development have for companies?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 4.0)
Environmental degradation has emerged as one of the most pressing challenges of the modern era in some cities, municipal parks and natural landscape are being replaced by housing and commercial flats. I will strive to discuss the both view points in upcoming paragraphs with appropriate reasons before reaching to conclusions.
To embark with the statement, the primary reason why i hold this view is that, nowadays in the modern era commercial premises can create jobs and local businesses. New building may also lead better infrastructure including improved roads and public services. In addition, the growing papulation the authorities is constructing new structure spaces and makes new structure such as offices, shopping centres and hotels due to that economic development. For instance, according to the article of
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 3.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 4.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.0 |
| Overall | 4.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 3.0
The response severely fails to meet the length requirement, containing only 126 words compared to the minimum of 250 words, which heavily impacts task completion. Furthermore, the student completely misunderstands the task prompt. The essay discusses environmental degradation and municipal parks being replaced by commercial flats, which is entirely off-topic for the actual prompt regarding international assignments and employees living and working in another country. Because the writer addresses an unrelated prompt and is significantly underlength, the task is only minimally addressed, warranting a low band score.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0
The text is organized into an introduction and a fragmented second paragraph that trails off mid-sentence. The student attempts to use cohesive phrases such as 'To embark with the statement' and 'In addition', but these are misused or unnatural. Progression is hindered by the abrupt ending and off-topic arguments. Paragraphing is attempted, but the overall structure breaks down immediately due to the incomplete nature of the response, reflecting the descriptors for Band 4.
Lexical Resource — Band 4.0
The vocabulary used is basic and heavily repetitive, featuring phrases like 'modern era', 'commercial premises', and 'new structure'. There are noticeable word choice errors and awkward collocations, such as 'growing papulation the authorities is constructing new structure spaces'. The range is limited and inadequate for discussing complex topics, and spelling errors like 'papulation' further pull down the score, placing the writing firmly in Band 4.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0
The text displays a very limited range of structures with frequent grammatical errors that impede communication. Examples include 'I will strive to discuss the both view points' and 'New building may also lead better infrastructure'. There are issues with subject-verb agreement and missing prepositions throughout the short text. Complex sentence attempts are faulty, and the response ends abruptly in the middle of a relative clause, fitting the Band 4 descriptors.
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