Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-09-21
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
Nowadays many large international companies offer their staff the opportunity to spend a period of time living and working in another country.
Why might this opportunity be good for employees?
What advantages does this development have for companies?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 4.5)
In recent time, every person wants to move abroad due to many facinating chances for job and study as well. In this eassy, I will decribe the reasons and advantages of living and working in another country.
Firstly, many big international compnies provide job opportunities to the youngsters after graduation. I think working in another country is a life changing chance, which will make better future. There are many large international compnies such as Google , Amazon, BHP, Microsoft provide job and living expences.
Furthermore, These big compnies provide accomodation with good pay scale to their employes. Many employees can earn great earning with high quality life. For example, nowadys nearly 95% students like live in another country beacuse of joba and study opportunities.
Moreover,companies also provide visa requirements such as, sponsership which is a pathway of permanent residency of abroad. Many students from india like to live in Canada and Australia.
Secondly, employees can also invite their family in abroad. These advantages are marvelous life changing for any employee.
Moving further, In abroad large compnies have great benifities to invite employes from another country such as skill orianted worker, hardworking employees set long term goals for company. These companies offer training to their staff such as training workshops for new employees.
Additionly, companies need skilled worker, who will make the company successfull . These companies allows to use their employees every facility such as free house, wifi, transport, food and health insurance.
In conclusion, Big compnies provide every facilitiy to their employes to boosted productivity with planing. It is great deal for both company and employe for growth.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.0 |
| Overall | 4.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response addresses all parts of the prompt by discussing why living and working abroad is beneficial for employees (e.g., life-changing chance, accommodation, visa pathways) and what advantages it brings to companies (e.g., skilled workers, increased productivity). However, the development of ideas is somewhat limited and repetitive. For instance, the points about companies providing facilities and accommodation are reiterated several times without significant expansion. The position is generally clear, though the supporting examples tend to be broad assertions rather than fully elaborated illustrations. Overall, the response meets the requirements for a Band 5.0 as it addresses the task, but ideas remain underdeveloped and lack sufficient depth.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The text shows some basic organisation with transitional phrases like 'Firstly', 'Furthermore', and 'In conclusion'. However, the overall progression is disrupted by fragmented paragraphing and a lack of clear thematic grouping. Several paragraphs consist of only one or two sentences, which weakens the essay structure. Cohesive devices are sometimes used mechanically or inaccurately, such as 'Moving further' and 'Additionly'. Referencing is also occasionally unclear, making it difficult to follow the logical flow between ideas. This level of organisation aligns with a Band 5.0 descriptor, where some structure is present but clear overall progression is lacking.
Lexical Resource — Band 4.0
The lexical range is limited and frequently repetitive, relying heavily on basic vocabulary such as 'big companies', 'jobs', 'life', and 'provide'. There are numerous spelling errors throughout the text, including 'facinating', 'eassy', 'decribe', 'compnies', 'expences', 'accomodation', 'employes', 'nowadys', 'sponsership', 'orianted', 'benifities', 'Additionly', 'facilitiy', and 'planing'. While the meaning is generally discernible despite these errors, the frequent inaccuracies in word choice and spelling place this performance firmly at Band 4.0, as basic vocabulary is repeatedly misspelled and lexical control is weak.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0
The essay displays a very limited range of grammatical structures. Simple sentences dominate, and attempts at complex structures often contain noticeable errors, such as missing articles, incorrect prepositions, and subject-verb agreement issues (e.g., 'many large international compnies such as Google , Amazon, BHP, Microsoft provide' and 'companies allows to use their employees'). Punctuation is also problematic, with erratic spacing around commas and periods. Frequent errors cause some difficulty for the reader and impede smooth reading, corresponding to a Band 4.0 level.
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