Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-09-21
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
Nowadays many large international companies offer their staff the opportunity to spend a period of time living and working in another country.
Why might this opportunity be good for employees?
What advantages does this development have for companies?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
Today,numerous multinational companies provide the opportunities to their employees to move to another country for work and spend some time their.It is crucial both for the company as well as the worker.It provide the enormous opportunities to the individual such as learn advanced skills and build the relations while working with the foreign clients and explore the world which helps in their personal growth. Another benefits for the business are that the significant rise in the productivity of tthe employees and expand the business horizon by build the good relatios with foreign clients.
There are number of opportunities for the development of an individual such as get proficient in advance communication skill while dealing with the foreign workers.For example,employees get more opportunities if they are good communication skill. Another opportunity is that employees explore the international businesses and get the various ideas to deal with different situations. Consequently, it helps in their growth and make them able to deal with situations at socio-economic level efficiently and effectively.
There are number of benefits for companies as well. The first one is that the productivity of the business will significantly surged while dealing at international business.Another benefit is that the companies can expand the business horizon by dealing with the foreign business and make the good connection with international cliets which helps in rising the profitibility of the business.For instance, the Multinational companies can help in rise the prductivity of the business by create connections with foreign clients which is good the domestic nation as well.
To recapitulate, i reiterate that stay in another country for some time provide the good opportunities to the individual and helps in the personal growth. Although,it is also helps in the development of the companies by dealing with interantional companies.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 6.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0
The response addresses all parts of the task by discussing both why international work opportunities are beneficial for employees and the advantages they bring to companies. The student attempts to develop ideas relating to skill enhancement, personal growth, productivity, and business expansion. However, the development is somewhat repetitive, particularly in the discussion of foreign clients and business horizons, which recur across multiple paragraphs. Furthermore, some ideas are stated rather than fully extended with specific supporting examples. For instance, the mention that employees get more opportunities if they have good communication skills remains underdeveloped. Overall, the response meets the criteria for Band 6 by addressing all parts with relevant ideas, though the support lacks depth and suffers from redundancy.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The essay demonstrates a coherent overall arrangement with clear paragraphing, dividing the introduction, individual benefits, company benefits, and conclusion. However, cohesion is frequently faulty and mechanical. The student relies heavily on basic cohesive structures like 'There are number of opportunities...' and 'Another benefit is that...'. Furthermore, referencing and logical progression are occasionally hindered by poor punctuation, missing spaces after commas (e.g., 'Today,numerous'), and awkward transitions. Paragraphs flow topically, but internal cohesion lacks flexibility and natural connection, placing this performance solidly at Band 5.0.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The student attempts a range of vocabulary appropriate to the topic, including terms such as 'multinational companies', 'socio-economic level', 'productivity', and 'profitibility'. However, there are numerous lexical and spelling inaccuracies throughout the text, such as 'relatios' instead of relations, 'cliets' instead of clients, and 'prductivity'. Word choice is frequently awkward or repetitive, such as 'deal with different situations' and 'deal with international business' repeated multiple times. The limited precision and frequent surface-level errors place this response at Band 5.0.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The essay contains a mix of simple and complex sentence forms, demonstrating an attempt at structures like subordinate clauses ('if they are good communication skill'). However, grammatical accuracy is weak. There are frequent and systematic errors, such as subject-verb agreement issues ('It provide', 'the productivity... will significantly surged'), incorrect preposition use ('stay in another country'), missing articles, and widespread punctuation and spacing errors (e.g., lack of spaces after commas and periods). These errors frequently cause strain for the reader, though meaning remains retrievable, warranting a Band 5.0.
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