Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-10-16

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Nowadays many large international companies offer their staff the opportunity to spend a period of time living and working in another country.

Why might this opportunity be good for employees?

What advantages does this development have for companies?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

Nowadays many international companies give there empoyees to spend period of time living and working in another country. this will make more opportunities for employees.

There are many reasons to work in abroad, it will improve in are craft and it helps us to have different kind of expeiences like by intracting with different kind of peoples we can learn different kind of languages. and also it changes are lifestyle plus our communicateing skills. by liveing with people of different kind of backgrounds also improves are confidence. As we are pakistanies so it can help us to secure great jobs.

We can earn well as compare to ours countries. Also this opportunity is good for employees because we can gain great jobs on great positions. the good thing is by working in forgin countries people can gain great working exprience. companies can have more great employees who have great work expriences form all over the world. it is benifical for both of them companies and employees.working in abroad can help people to learn new working mathods and it will benifet for companies to earn more money. And it will also updrade companies working expeirnces. Great team is an automatically achivenment for a companie.

The companies who prefer skills they can engage good employess. people who are living in aborad are haveing outstanding living exprience. By liveing with differnet kind of people and haveing different culture different festivals. By working in abroad employees can have great work and having good expeience.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5

You address both questions: employee benefits include learning languages, improving communication and confidence, and gaining overseas work experience; company benefits include access to skilled staff and learning new working methods. However, these points are mostly listed rather than explained or supported with a relevant example, and some claims—such as companies earning more money—need a clearer link to international placements. The response is also 241 words, below the required 250-word minimum; the nine words copied from the task prompt are not counted. This shortfall, together with limited development of the ideas, means the task is only partially addressed. To strengthen the response, explain how one employee benefit and one company benefit arise, then support each with a specific example.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0

There is a basic attempt to organise the response: the opening introduces the topic, the next paragraph focuses mainly on employees, and later sentences discuss companies. However, the progression is difficult to follow because employee and company benefits are mixed together, and the final paragraph repeats points about overseas experience and different cultures rather than advancing the discussion. Linking words such as “Also,” “because,” and “And” are used, but connections between ideas are often unclear; for example, “Great team is an automatically achivenment for a companie” is not clearly linked to the preceding point. Use separate, focused paragraphs for each question, and connect each benefit to its explanation with clear referencing.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

You use some task-related vocabulary, including “confidence,” “working experience,” “skills,” and “different backgrounds,” so the reader can identify the main subject. However, the vocabulary is basic and repetitive, with “great” and “different kind of” appearing repeatedly. Several spelling errors, including “empoyees,” “expeiences,” and “benifical,” make the writing less clear and reduce control of vocabulary. Some phrases are also unnatural, such as “work in abroad” and “upgrade companies working experiences.” Build a more precise range for discussing international work, and check spelling and collocations carefully. For instance, describe how employees “develop professional skills” and how companies “benefit from a more experienced workforce.”

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

The response attempts some longer sentences, for example, “by interacting with different kind of peoples we can learn different kind of languages,” but most structures remain simple or are joined without clear grammatical control. Errors in sentence formation and agreement occur frequently: “this will make more opportunities” lacks a clear grammatical construction, while “people who are living in aborad are haveing” combines incompatible verb forms. There are also problems with articles, plurals, and prepositions, as in “work in abroad” and “different kind of people.” Capitalisation and punctuation are inconsistent, including the lowercase “this” after the opening sentence and run-on sentences. Practise accurate simple sentences first, then add controlled clauses using “because,” “which,” or “so that.”

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