Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-10-22

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Nowadays many large international companies offer their staff the opportunity to spend a period of time living and working in another country.

Why might this opportunity be good for employees?

What advantages does this development have for companies?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

in this past fased era of this life everyone want to became a successfull in order to bright their future so there are larger number of multinational compaines those provide the golden chance to thie stff members to stay in other parts of the world and working fromm over there. Employees can take a postive responese from this chance along with this is not oinly benefical for stff but also for the particular company growth.

on the one hand, first and foremost, today is a competetation era everyone do hardwork for thir bright future so if employees live far from their families so they can focuse more on their work rather than other things so this is golden opportunity for the people peronal growth. futhermore, in this techonlogy world every country have different type of techonlogy to deal with everthing ifd people go outside so maybe indiviualds can learn about new skills. For instance, india is not too much developed country but if people national companies profits so they need to send their employess in other parts like USA and canada.

on the other hand, everperson have different kind of skills and talent so if people can go outside so he or she can show their talent in front of other and they can share their ideas with other so sometime it could be beneficial for the company economy along with this people can arrange mettings and prompote their prioduct on larger scale which helps to increse the economy grpowth of any particular comapny

in conclusion, there are various resons why this is postive trend and it is not only benefival for people but also company,

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You address both questions and maintain a generally positive view, with relevant points about employees learning new skills and companies promoting products or sharing ideas internationally. The example involving Indian companies sending staff to the USA or Canada also relates to the topic, although its meaning and connection to the employee benefits are not fully clear. However, the ideas are limited and often asserted rather than explained: for example, living away from family is said to help employees focus, but this claim needs qualification or support. The company benefits are also mentioned briefly without showing how overseas experience improves performance or business outcomes. Develop each main point with a clear explanation and a specific example, and state your position more clearly in the introduction and conclusion.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has an identifiable introduction, two body paragraphs and a conclusion, and the paragraphs broadly separate employee benefits from company advantages. Linking phrases such as “on the one hand,” “furthermore” and “on the other hand” help signal this structure. However, progression within paragraphs is not always clear: the first body paragraph moves from family separation to technology and then to an example about national companies, without explaining the links. Several ideas are joined in long sentences, and repeated connectors sometimes make the writing feel mechanical. The conclusion repeats the general positive view but does not summarise the two main advantages. Organise each paragraph around one central point, explain it before adding an example, and use clearer sentence boundaries and references.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

You attempt topic-related vocabulary, including “multinational companies,” “skills,” “talent,” “share their ideas” and “promote their product,” so the reader can identify the main subject. However, the range is limited and many spelling and word-choice errors make the message harder to follow, such as “competetation era,” “thie stff members” and “company economy.” Some phrases are also unnatural or imprecise, including “take a positive response from this chance” and “profits so they need to send their employees.” Aim for accurate, natural collocations rather than adding more ambitious words. Proofread spelling carefully and learn useful phrases such as “gain international experience,” “develop professional skills” and “expand into new markets.”

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple statements and longer sentences with clauses, for example the sentence beginning “if employees live far from their families” and the point about staff sharing ideas. This shows an effort to express relationships between ideas. However, the range is limited, and complex sentences are often faulty, with frequent problems in agreement, verb forms, articles and sentence construction. Examples include “everyone want to became,” “every country have,” and “if people go outside so maybe individuals can learn.” These errors sometimes make the intended meaning difficult to interpret. Practise building accurate sentences with conditional clauses and conjunctions, and avoid joining several complete ideas with “so.” Check subject–verb agreement and verb forms before submitting.

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