Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-10-25

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Nowadays many large international companies offer their staff the opportunity to spend a period of time living and working in another country.

Why might this opportunity be good for employees?

What advantages does this development have for companies?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

These days many forigen industries offer their employee to spend a period of time living and working in another nation which I personally beleive that it is the good oppertunity for the staff to gain the experience internationally and learning new culture as well, it will aslo going to give good impact on the company as well as their economy growth. I am going to discuss my points in the depth in upcoming paragraphs.

To begin with the first point is that, getting forigen experience wich will help the individual in their future if they want to work for the big and well known multi national companies from there they can make their future more bright which can help them financially because having an international experince some companies offer a good salary which provide the human a good or might be a luxerious life.

Secondly, working in other countries is also beneficial for learning new culture and language moreover, it also offer the person to try the new type of cousine and it also gives the oppertunity to meet the new people and make their friend circle bigger which supports the person to understand the local things. Thirdly and lastly working abroad is also going to give the benefits to the company in various ways like the company will get up to date about the new rules and policy or the technology which gives advantage to the company in an economy growth and the expansion of the new plants.

In conclusion, giving the oppertunity to the staff to working abroad is beneficial for both the employee and the company on the good side such as acquiring the international knowledge and learning new culture and the growth of the company economically and upto date tools and device.

AI examiner evaluation

CriterionBand
Task Achievement / Task Response6.0
Coherence and Cohesion6.0
Lexical Resource5.0
Grammatical Range and Accuracy5.0
Overall5.5

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

You address both parts of the prompt: employee benefits include gaining international experience, learning about another culture and language, and meeting new people; company benefits include learning about new policies and technology and supporting expansion. Your position—that the opportunity benefits both sides—is clear in the introduction and conclusion. However, the company advantages are less fully explained than the employee benefits, and some employee points, such as improved future prospects and salary, are asserted rather than supported with a specific example or explanation. Develop each main point by showing how it produces a practical benefit, and include a relevant example to make the discussion more convincing.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The response has a clear overall structure, with an introduction, a main discussion and a conclusion. Sequencing phrases such as “To begin with,” “Secondly,” and “In conclusion” help readers follow the points, and the employee and company benefits are generally grouped sensibly. However, the progression can feel mechanical: “Thirdly and lastly” introduces the company point within the same long paragraph as the employee benefits, making the shift less clear. Some links, including “moreover” and “as well,” are repetitive, and the opening sentence is difficult to follow because several ideas are joined together. Use separate paragraphs for the two parts of the question and make links between ideas more precise.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use enough topic-related vocabulary to communicate the main ideas, including “international experience,” “local,” “technology,” and “expansion.” There are also attempts at less common expressions, such as “financially” and “luxurious life.” However, spelling errors are noticeable, for example “forigen,” “beleive,” “oppertunity,” and “experince,” and some word choices or combinations are unnatural, such as “offer their employee to spend” and “the human a good…life.” Repetition of “good,” “company,” and “opportunity” also limits variety. Check spelling carefully and learn natural collocations for discussing employment and business benefits; this will make your meaning clearer and more precise.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and more extended sentence forms, and the response is generally understandable. However, complex sentences are often not controlled successfully. The opening sentence combines several clauses without a clear grammatical structure, while “it also offer the person” has a subject–verb agreement error and “the opportunity to staff to working abroad” uses an incorrect verb pattern. There are also problems with articles and sentence boundaries, as in “it is the good opportunity” and the long opening sentence. Aim for shorter, complete sentences first, then build complexity with accurate clauses. Review agreement, infinitive patterns after “opportunity,” and punctuation to make relationships between ideas easier to follow.

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