Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-11-05

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

All new employees at your workplace have a mentor - an experienced colleague who gives them advice and support in their career. As a new employee, you have been given details of your mentor.

Write a letter to introduce yourself to your new mentor. In your letter

• give a brief outline of your previous studies and work experience

• explain what help you hope your mentor can give

• suggest arrangements for a first meeting with your mentor

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear....... ,

Student answer (Band 6.0)

Dear Sir,

I am writing this letter to introduce myself to my trainer at The Old Spaghetti Factory, New westminster .

I have completed my Hospitality Mangement from Vancouver Community College, Downtown. It was a two year course, where I have learned about customer service, food handling and event organisation. Also, I have a couple of experience of working in small-owned restaurant at Hasting Street as a part-time server.

As I have prior education and experience in hospitality, I may not need to start from basic. However, I need assistance to get knowledge about the work ethics and food mannual of The Old Spaghetti Factory restaurent. Unfortunatly, I am a vegetarian, I would to know about the non-vegetarian items such as chick parm and sea food.

I was expecting to have a meeting before my first shift with you. I am availabe on sunday, a day before my first day at work, or we can meet before the shift start. I am bit nervous and anxious about the training, although I am expecting I will get enough help and good orientation of work from you.

I would like to know what day suits you the best for the meeting.

Best regards,

Jaspreet

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.5

You address all three requested points: you outline your hospitality studies and restaurant experience, explain that you want guidance on workplace practices and menu items, and suggest meeting before your first shift. The details about being vegetarian and feeling nervous make the letter personal and relevant. Some points, however, are less fully developed: “work ethics and food manual” is broad, and you could specify the practical guidance you want, such as learning service procedures or how to describe dishes to customers. The meeting proposal is clear, but “Sunday” and “before the shift” could be tied to a specific time or confirmed more directly. This covers the task well, with some ideas needing further development for a more complete response.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 7.0

The letter has a clear overall progression: introduction, background, requested support, and meeting arrangements. Paragraphing helps the reader distinguish these stages, and linking expressions such as “Also,” “However,” and “although” make relationships between ideas clear. The final question about which day suits the mentor provides a natural closing to the arrangements. Some connections could be smoother: the shift from requesting help with workplace practices to asking about non-vegetarian dishes is understandable but could be linked more explicitly to serving customers. The meeting details are also spread across two paragraphs, so combining them would make the closing section more cohesive. Overall, the organisation is logical and easy to follow.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use relevant vocabulary for the workplace and hospitality context, including “customer service,” “food handling,” “part-time server,” “work ethics,” and “orientation.” These choices communicate your background and needs, though the range is not always precise or natural. Phrases such as “a couple of experience,” “small-owned restaurant,” and “food manual” are awkward or inaccurate, while “trainer” does not match the task’s term “mentor.” There are also noticeable spelling errors, including “Mangement,” “Unfortunatly,” “restaurent,” and “availabe.” These do not prevent understanding, but they reduce the accuracy and control of your vocabulary. Focus on standard collocations and careful proofreading to make your language more natural.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

You use a mixture of simple and more developed sentence forms, including the relative clause “where I have learned…” and the contrast introduced by “although.” Most ideas remain understandable, but some grammatical errors recur. For example, “I have a couple of experience” needs a plural noun, and “I would to know” is missing a verb form. In “I am availabe on sunday … or we can meet before the shift start,” the verb agreement and sentence construction need attention. Articles and prepositions also need checking, as in “from basic” and “before the shift start.” These errors do not generally obscure your meaning, but more consistent control of verb patterns, agreement, and sentence boundaries would strengthen the letter.

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