Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-11-10
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
All new employees at your workplace have a mentor - an experienced colleague who gives them advice and support in their career. As a new employee, you have been given details of your mentor.
Write a letter to introduce yourself to your new mentor. In your letter
give a brief outline of your previous studies and work experience
explain what help you hope your mentor can give
suggest arrangements for a first meeting with your mentor
You do NOT need to write any addresses.
Begin your letter as follows:
Dear....... ,
Student answer (Band 5.5)
Dear Mr.Paul,
I hope you are doing well. I am writing to breifly introduce myself to you, I would work with you near the future.
To start with, currently I working in Alpha institute in a accountant position, I have studies of business management my major subject is account. I have experince of 3 years.
As I am your junior. I want your seek guidance to improve my prestation and well work in the project. If I complete my project on time then I will do my project. It would be greatful if you give me specific anaytical shortcuts to complete project.
It will be our first meeting. we will meet in the room 203, avaliablity of all equipment such as 3d project and computers. It is quit place where I can clear doubt from you.
Thankyou for your consideration. I look forward to your prompt response.
Yours faithfully,
Madhuri.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 6.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5
You address the three requested points: you mention business-management studies and three years of work experience, ask for guidance, and propose a meeting place. However, the study and work details are compressed and unclear, particularly “I have studies of business management my major subject is account.” The help you want is also not fully explained: “improve my prestation” and “well work in the project” do not make clear what skills or career support you need. The meeting suggestion gives a room but no date, time, or clear invitation for your mentor to confirm. Develop these details and make the purpose of the meeting and the support you seek more specific.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0
The letter has a recognisable structure, with an opening, separate paragraphs for your background and request, a meeting proposal, and a closing. Phrases such as “To start with” and “It will be our first meeting” help signal the stages of the message. However, progression within sentences is sometimes difficult to follow: the background sentence joins several points without clear links, and “If I complete my project on time then I will do my project” interrupts the explanation of the support you need. The meeting paragraph also shifts abruptly from the proposed room to equipment and then to clearing doubts. Use clearer links between each idea and ensure every sentence contributes to the letter’s purpose.
Lexical Resource: Band 5.0
You use some vocabulary relevant to a workplace letter, including “guidance,” “project,” “business management,” and “work experience.” However, the range is limited, and several inaccurate word choices or spellings make your meaning unclear. For example, “prestation” does not express the intended idea, while “specific anaytical shortcuts” is difficult to interpret. “I would work with you near the future” also uses an unsuitable phrase for describing your upcoming role. Choose precise workplace expressions, such as “improve my performance,” “develop my analytical skills,” and “in the near future.” Proofread spelling and use natural collocations so the reader can understand your requests without guessing.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0
You attempt both simple and more extended sentences, and the overall letter format is understandable. However, grammatical errors are frequent and sometimes make relationships between ideas difficult to follow. Examples include “currently I working,” which needs a finite verb, and “I have studies of business management,” which has an incorrect structure. The sentence beginning “I am writing to breifly introduce myself to you, I would work…” joins two independent clauses incorrectly. There are also problems with articles and sentence boundaries, as in “in a accountant position” and the lowercase “we” after a full stop. Practise accurate present-tense forms and build longer sentences with clear clause connections.
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