Band 7.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 7.0 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-11-10

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

All new employees at your workplace have a mentor - an experienced colleague who gives them advice and support in their career. As a new employee, you have been given details of your mentor.

Write a letter to introduce yourself to your new mentor. In your letter

• give a brief outline of your previous studies and work experience

• explain what help you hope your mentor can give

• suggest arrangements for a first meeting with your mentor

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear....... ,

Student answer (Band 7.0)

Dear Ms Kathleen,

I hope you are doing great! I am Sukhdeep Kaur and got hired as a day care provider in YMCA on November 8, 2026. My orientation is next week under your mentorship and I am really excited about your guidance throughout the week.

I have completed my Responsible Adult course and Early Childhood Education Assistant program from Pacific Rim college this year that provide me the required license to work with school age and early age programs in Canada. I have two years experience of working with children from India where I used to plan activities for them according to their age and safety.

I am a bit nervous about dealing with beahvaioural issues in kids such as autism as it is not common in India. It will be great if I could learn some practical skills from your extensive experience to handle such situations.

Could you please arrange a meeting before or after the orientation next week in our daycare? I will be available both times and would love to sit with you to learn more under your expertise.

I look forward to hearing from you.

Yours sincerely,

Sukhdeep Kaur

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 7.5

You address all three requested points clearly: you outline your training and two years of childcare experience, explain that you want practical guidance with behavioural needs, and propose meeting around orientation. The details about planning age-appropriate activities and your interest in supporting children with autism make the letter relevant and personal. The request for help is clear, though it could be developed further by naming another area of workplace support, such as communicating with parents or learning the centre’s procedures. The meeting suggestion is also somewhat open-ended; offering a specific day or time would make the arrangement more actionable. Overall, the purpose and tone are consistently clear, with the main ideas supported by relevant details.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 7.5

The letter follows a clear, logical sequence: introduction, education and experience, the support you hope to receive, and a meeting request. Separate paragraphs make each purpose easy to identify, and transitions such as “I have completed” and “Could you please” help the reader follow the progression. The opening and closing also suit a personal-professional letter. To make the organisation more polished, connect the orientation detail more directly to the proposed meeting, since the first paragraph says the orientation is under the mentor’s guidance while the later request leaves the timing broad. Some links between ideas are implicit rather than fully developed, but the overall progression remains clear and easy to follow.

Lexical Resource: Band 6.5

Your vocabulary is adequate for the task and includes relevant terms such as “Responsible Adult course,” “Early Childhood Education Assistant,” “school age,” and “behavioural issues.” Phrases like “practical skills” and “extensive experience” also communicate your request appropriately. However, some choices are less natural or precise in this context: “doing great” is quite casual, “early age programs” is unclear, and “learn more under your expertise” is an awkward collocation. There is also a spelling error in “beahvaioural.” These do not prevent understanding, but more accurate collocations and a consistently professional register would show greater flexibility and control.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 6.5

You use a mix of simple and more developed sentence forms, including the relative clause in “program … that provide me” and the conditional request “It will be great if I could learn.” Most sentences are understandable, and punctuation generally supports the letter’s meaning. Some grammatical errors remain, however. In “program … that provide,” the verb does not agree with the singular noun; “program … that provides” is needed. “I am Sukhdeep Kaur and got hired” also shifts from a present-tense introduction to a past-tense verb without a repeated subject, so “and I was hired” is clearer. Review article use and sentence construction as well, for example “two years of experience.” Greater accuracy in these patterns would strengthen the response.

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