Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-11-10

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

All new employees at your workplace have a mentor - an experienced colleague who gives them advice and support in their career. As a new employee, you have been given details of your mentor.

Write a letter to introduce yourself to your new mentor. In your letter

• give a brief outline of your previous studies and work experience

• explain what help you hope your mentor can give

• suggest arrangements for a first meeting with your mentor

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear....... ,

Student answer (Band 6.0)

Dear John,

I hope you are doing well. My name is Ismail Qureshi and i have just joined the company, and I would like some advice on my career as a fresher.

I have completed my masters degree in IT Engineering from University Of Toronto and in addition to that I have done IT dveloper certificate which was online from Harvard University. In terms of work experience, I have completed my internship which was in NVIDIA but, I do not have any on field knowledge. I was hoping you would suggest me on how to move forward in my career and gain more and more related experience.

Lastly, I suggest that we should have a meeting in-person or online via zoom, if you are available anywhere between November 10 to 15 as weekend lies in this dates. I look forward to our meeting and hearing from you soon.

Thank You

Ismail Qureshi

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.5

You address all three required points: you outline your IT studies and NVIDIA internship, explain that you want guidance on career development and gaining experience, and propose a first meeting. The purpose is clear and the information is relevant. The study and work background is reasonably specific, while the help you seek is less fully explained: “suggest me on how to move forward” could be developed by naming particular areas, such as adapting to workplace projects or identifying skills to build. The meeting proposal gives a date range and online or in-person options, but “if you are available anywhere between” leaves the exact arrangement vague. More detail on the support you need and a clearer proposed time would make the letter more fully developed.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.5

The letter follows a sensible sequence: introduction, education and experience, the support you hope to receive, and meeting arrangements. Paragraphing helps distinguish these stages, and phrases such as “In terms of work experience” and “Lastly” guide the reader through the content. The progression is generally clear, though some linking is mechanical, and the long opening sentence combines several ideas with repeated “and.” The transition from your internship to your lack of practical knowledge could also be smoother. For a more polished flow, use shorter sentences where ideas change and connect the internship directly to the specific experience you hope to gain. The closing is appropriate, although a conventional sign-off would complete the letter more naturally.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

Your vocabulary is sufficient to communicate the main points, including relevant terms such as “internship,” “career,” and “related experience.” However, several noticeable word-choice, collocation, and spelling problems limit precision. “IT dveloper certificate” contains a spelling error, while “on field knowledge” is not a natural expression; “practical, hands-on experience” would be clearer. “Suggest me on how” is also an awkward collocation, and “gain more and more related experience” is repetitive. The phrase “weekend lies in this dates” is difficult to interpret. Aim for accurate, natural workplace language rather than repeating general terms: for example, specify the skills or responsibilities you want to develop. These improvements would make the message sound more fluent and professional.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

You attempt a mix of simple and more complex sentences, and the overall meaning remains understandable. Some grammatical and punctuation errors are present, particularly in longer sentences. In “My name is Ismail Qureshi and i have just joined the company, and I would like…,” the repeated conjunctions make the structure awkward, and “i” should be capitalised. “I have completed my internship which was in NVIDIA but, I do not have…” needs clearer clause punctuation and a more controlled relative clause. In the meeting sentence, “if you are available anywhere between November 10 to 15 as weekend lies in this dates” has problems with the date construction, article, and plural agreement. Use shorter, well-punctuated sentences and check agreement and articles to improve accuracy while retaining some complex structures.

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