Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-11-10

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

All new employees at your workplace have a mentor - an experienced colleague who gives them advice and support in their career. As a new employee, you have been given details of your mentor.

Write a letter to introduce yourself to your new mentor. In your letter

• give a brief outline of your previous studies and work experience

• explain what help you hope your mentor can give

• suggest arrangements for a first meeting with your mentor

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear....... ,

Student answer (Band 6.0)

Dear Sir,

I hope you are doing well. My name is Anu, and I have recently joined this job. I am glad that you will be my mentor. Also, it will be so exciting to share and express my professional skills and abilities.

Regarding my educational background, I have completed a three-year early childhood education program. Besides this, I also have some work experience in customer service, where I have developed my communication and problem-solving skills. I am eager to learn and improve my professional skills and gain new knowledge.

I am new to this place, and I will appreciate your guidance and advice while sharing your experience, skills and discussing the company's policies. Instead of this, I will be very thankful if you show your practical skills to save my time and energy. I hope you will help me with patience and understanding while working as a worker.

I want to arrange our first meeting on Friday next week if possible, but if it does not work for you, then you can suggest any other day to me, as I am flexible, so if you want to decide on any different days then we can fix our first meeting.

Yours sincerely,

Anu

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

You address all three requested points: you outline your early childhood education studies and customer-service experience, describe the guidance you want, and propose Friday next week for a first meeting. These details make the letter relevant and its purpose clear. However, the help you hope to receive is not always expressed precisely. For example, “show your practical skills to save my time and energy” is unclear about what you want the mentor to demonstrate, while “discussing the company’s policies” is a more specific and useful request. The meeting suggestion is flexible, but could be more complete by proposing a time or place. Develop these requests more clearly and directly so each part of the task is equally well addressed.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.5

The letter has a clear overall arrangement: an introduction, a paragraph about your background, a paragraph about the support you want, and a closing paragraph proposing a meeting. Linking expressions such as “Regarding my educational background” and “Besides this” help guide the reader, and the progression is easy to follow. Some connections are less effective or repetitive, however. “Instead of this” does not clearly connect the request that follows to the previous idea, and the final sentence repeats the flexibility point several times. Use more precise links between related requests and divide or simplify the long meeting sentence. This would retain the clear paragraph structure while making cohesion more natural and less mechanical.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use enough vocabulary to communicate your background and intentions, including “early childhood education,” “customer service,” “problem-solving skills,” and “guidance.” These choices are relevant to a workplace letter. However, some phrases are imprecise or unnatural in context, which limits the clarity and flexibility of your vocabulary. “Share and express my professional skills and abilities” is vague, and “show your practical skills to save my time and energy” does not clearly convey the support you want. “Working as a worker” is also repetitive. Choose more specific workplace expressions, such as asking for help understanding procedures or applying skills to your role, and avoid repeating the same idea with near-synonyms. This will make your requests sound more natural and professional.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 6.0

You use a mix of simple and more complex sentence forms, and most of the message remains understandable. For instance, “I have completed a three-year… program” and the conditional meeting suggestion show attempts to express different time frames and possibilities. Some grammatical and punctuation issues remain. In “I will appreciate your guidance,” the future form is less suitable than “I would appreciate”; “while sharing your experience, skills and discussing” does not maintain a parallel structure; and the final sentence is a long run-on joined by several clauses. The phrase “if you want to decide on any different days” also has an unclear grammatical relationship to the earlier suggestion. Check verb forms and parallel constructions, and break long sentences into shorter units to improve control.

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