Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-11-11

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

All new employees at your workplace have a mentor - an experienced colleague who gives them advice and support in their career. As a new employee, you have been given details of your mentor.

Write a letter to introduce yourself to your new mentor. In your letter

• give a brief outline of your previous studies and work experience

• explain what help you hope your mentor can give

• suggest arrangements for a first meeting with your mentor

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear....... ,

Student answer (Band 6.0)

Dear Mr Micheal,

I am glad you have been assigned as my mentor. I am writing this letter to properly introduce myself and I also suggest possible adjustment towards this development.

I am currently a BSC holder of Banking and Finance, graduated from the university of Benin. Before I got employed here at Aaron and Hur publishing, I previously worked as intern in the sales department of a Pure water factory, where I developed the skills of marketing.

Furthermore, I would like to improve my communication skills luckily, you are a very good with interacting with people, I hope to learn that skill from you as I believe it will be of great help to me and also beneficial to the company in terms of persuading clients to patronize Aaron and Hur publishing.

I would like to meet up with you physical next week to properly introduce myself .

Yours faithfully

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

You address all three requested points: you outline your Banking and Finance studies and sales internship, explain that you want to improve your communication skills, and propose meeting next week. The purpose of the letter is clear, and linking the skill to persuading clients gives your request some relevance to the workplace. However, the study and work history are brief, and the proposed meeting is not fully arranged: “next week” gives no specific day, time, or place. The opening also says you will “suggest possible adjustment towards this development,” which is unclear and does not add a useful detail. Develop the background slightly and offer a concrete meeting option, such as a day and time, to make the letter more complete.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.5

The letter has a clear overall sequence: introduction, background, the support you hope to receive, and a meeting proposal. Paragraphing helps distinguish these stages, and transitions such as “Before” and “Furthermore” make the progression easy to follow. This coherent arrangement is a strength. Some connections are less smooth, however: “I am writing this letter to properly introduce myself and I also suggest…” combines the purpose with an unclear second idea, while the long sentence beginning “I would like to improve my communication skills” joins several points without clear punctuation. The final meeting suggestion feels abrupt. Use clearer sentence boundaries and connect the request for support to a specific meeting arrangement to make cohesion more natural and less dependent on basic transitions.

Lexical Resource: Band 6.0

You use an adequate range of vocabulary for a professional introduction, including “mentor,” “sales department,” “marketing,” “communication skills,” and “persuading clients.” These choices make your background and goals understandable, and “beneficial to the company” shows an attempt to express workplace relevance. Some word choices and collocations are inaccurate or unnatural, though. “Possible adjustment towards this development” is difficult to interpret, “BSC holder” is not a natural way to describe your qualification, and “meet up with you physical” uses the wrong form and an informal phrase for this context. Aim for precise, conventional expressions such as “arrange a meeting in person” and “I hold a bachelor’s degree.” Check spelling and capitalization of names and qualifications as well.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 6.0

You use both simple sentences and longer structures, including a relative clause in “where I developed the skills of marketing” and a reason clause with “as I believe.” The main message remains understandable despite some grammatical and punctuation errors. For example, “I am currently a BSC holder of Banking and Finance, graduated from…” has an awkward sentence structure; “you are a very good with interacting” has an unnecessary article; and “meet up with you physical” needs a different grammatical form. The long sentence about communication skills also needs clearer punctuation, and the closing sentence has a space before its full stop. Practise forming complete, well-controlled sentences and proofreading articles, word forms, and punctuation while retaining some complex structures.

See this exact question answered at other band scores. The same prompt compared across bands.

Browse more IELTS Writing model answers or get your own writing scored by the same AI examiner.