Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-11-12

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

All new employees at your workplace have a mentor - an experienced colleague who gives them advice and support in their career. As a new employee, you have been given details of your mentor.

Write a letter to introduce yourself to your new mentor. In your letter

• give a brief outline of your previous studies and work experience

• explain what help you hope your mentor can give

• suggest arrangements for a first meeting with your mentor

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear....... ,

Student answer (Band 5.5)

Dear Sir,

I am writing thi letter for introducing myself as i joined your estemated company BBS last weak and i am very very grateful for your support and carinh nature for me. I would thankful to you.

Firstly i would introduce myself my name is sumaya akter and graduated from Northern University Bangladesh from CSE(Computer science and technology) Department. I am an Android Apps developer. I do work another company since 4 years. I have to many responsibilies like has i have to handle clients and solving their technical erors. I am able to work so much pressure. As a developer i got many erors so have to be patience and have to problem solver. I am able to work so much stress.

I would very appreciate if you would help me because so much projects is overlaps here and deadline is coming near. If you would help me its helps me from stress and i increase my productivity. I hope our daily corporate culture becomes more efficent if we help each others.

I would like to meet with you in a coffee shop which is located from our company's rooftops. I think it makes our bonding more strong.

I eagarly waiting for your reasponse.

Your faithful

Sumaya Akter

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You address all three requested points: you introduce your studies and four years of work experience, explain that you need support with overlapping projects and deadlines, and suggest meeting at a coffee shop. These details make the letter relevant and give the mentor a basic picture of your situation. However, the help you want is not very specific: explain whether you need guidance with prioritising tasks, understanding workplace procedures, or developing your technical skills. The meeting proposal also needs practical arrangements, such as suggesting a day or time and checking whether the mentor is available. The opening and closing are rather formal for a colleague, which makes the relationship less clear.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The letter has a coherent overall arrangement: it moves from your introduction and experience to the support you need, then to a meeting suggestion and closing. Paragraph breaks help distinguish these topics, and markers such as “Firstly” make the sequence easy to follow. However, some connections are mechanical or unclear. For example, “I would very appreciate if you would help me because so much projects is overlaps here” combines several ideas without clearly showing how the mentor’s support would address the workload. The repeated statements about stress and pressure also interrupt progression. Use clearer links between your experience, the specific guidance you need, and the proposed meeting, while avoiding repetition.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use vocabulary relevant to the workplace, including “clients,” “technical errors,” “projects,” “deadline,” and “productivity,” so the reader can understand the general context. However, the range is limited and several spelling, word-form, and collocation errors make the writing less clear or natural: “estemated,” “carinh,” “responsibilies,” and “I am able to work so much pressure.” Some phrases are also imprecise, such as “projects is overlaps” and “our bonding more strong.” Aim for accurate, natural workplace expressions and check spelling carefully. For example, describe your experience as handling client queries and resolving technical issues, and explain that you would value guidance in managing competing deadlines.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt some longer sentences and use a range of basic structures, but control is inconsistent. Errors in verb forms, agreement, articles, and sentence construction occur throughout, as in “I do work another company since 4 years,” “so much projects is overlaps,” and “I would thankful to you.” These patterns sometimes make the reader pause to interpret your meaning. There are also run-on or incomplete constructions, including “As a developer i got many erors so have to be patience and have to problem solver.” Practise forming complete sentences with a clear subject and verb, and review present perfect forms for experience, plural agreement, and conditional requests. More accurate simple sentences would improve clarity before you attempt longer ones.

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