Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-11-12

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

All new employees at your workplace have a mentor - an experienced colleague who gives them advice and support in their career. As a new employee, you have been given details of your mentor.

Write a letter to introduce yourself to your new mentor. In your letter

• give a brief outline of your previous studies and work experience

• explain what help you hope your mentor can give

• suggest arrangements for a first meeting with your mentor

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear....... ,

Student answer (Band 6.0)

Dear Sir or Madam,

I am Alice a new employee in your pharmaceutical company. I have been completed a master's degree in microbiology. Following this, I have a year of experience, where I am responsible for collecting water samples of purified water followed by chemical and microbial testing. I possess potential interpersonal skills which helps me to stand out in all audits.

In addition, I was delighted to know you will be my mentor, I hope we will have a great learning and engaging experience. I would like to broaden my knowledge in microbial limit test one of the substantial tests in microbiology to count number of microorganisms in the given sample. I am confident that I will be a valuable addition to your team.

Moreover, I knew in your company there is an introductory day where we greet all potential team, while I would like to recommend you to end this session soon and deliver me structured lesson on how this company function, does their work based on Indian pharmacopeia or in house methods.

I would therefore thankful to you if you give me brief intro of this firm which equips me with the foundational knowledge required to do work inevitably. I hope we met soon.

Yours faithfully,

Alice

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You cover the three requested points: you outline your microbiology degree and year of work experience, identify microbial-limit testing as an area where you want guidance, and raise the possibility of an introductory meeting. These details make the letter relevant and give the mentor a useful sense of your background. However, the help you want is not always framed clearly as support from the mentor: asking them to “deliver me structured lesson” and to explain the company’s methods sounds more like a demand than a collaborative request. The meeting suggestion is also unclear because it focuses on changing the introductory day rather than proposing a time or format for meeting. Develop these requests more tactfully and specifically.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The letter has a recognisable progression from your background, to your learning goals, and then to a possible introductory meeting. Paragraphing helps separate these topics, and linking expressions such as “Following this,” “In addition,” and “Moreover” make the sequence easy to follow overall. Some connections, however, are mechanical or unclear. For example, “Moreover, I knew in your company there is an introductory day” does not clearly connect the meeting proposal to the mentor relationship, while the long sentence about ending the session and delivering a lesson combines several ideas without a clear structure. The closing also moves abruptly from requesting an introduction to “I hope we met soon.” Use clearer transitions and organise the meeting request as a direct, separate proposal.

Lexical Resource: Band 6.0

You use a suitable range of workplace and scientific vocabulary, including “microbiology,” “purified water,” “microbial testing,” “audits,” and “foundational knowledge.” These terms help make your background and learning interests specific. There are also attempts at less common or formal expressions, such as “substantial tests” and “valuable addition,” though some choices are inaccurate or unnatural in context. “Potential interpersonal skills” does not clearly express the strength you intend, and “greet all potential team” is an awkward phrase. “Structured lesson” and “brief intro” are understandable but could be expressed more naturally and professionally. Aim for precise collocations and a consistently courteous register, especially when making requests of your mentor.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

You attempt both simple and more complex sentence forms, including a relative clause in “where I am responsible for collecting water samples” and a sentence explaining the purpose of microbial-limit testing. Some grammatical errors remain and occasionally make the intended meaning less clear. For example, “I have been completed a master's degree” uses an incorrect verb form; “skills which helps” has subject–verb disagreement; and “I would therefore thankful” is missing a verb. The question embedded in “how this company function, does their work…” is also not formed correctly. In addition, “I hope we met soon” uses the wrong tense. Review verb forms, agreement, and indirect-question structure, and proofread sentence boundaries and punctuation.

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