Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-11-13

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

All new employees at your workplace have a mentor - an experienced colleague who gives them advice and support in their career. As a new employee, you have been given details of your mentor.

Write a letter to introduce yourself to your new mentor. In your letter

• give a brief outline of your previous studies and work experience

• explain what help you hope your mentor can give

• suggest arrangements for a first meeting with your mentor

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear....... ,

Student answer (Band 5.5)

Dear Sir/Madam,

I am writting a letter to My new mentor.Sir, I recently join this company I am member of telephone operator's office.

Well, My name Muhammad Yaseen Malik I have complete my Intermediate from Hamza Army Public College in 2017 and also I have short computer course after that I serive 07 years in HBS Medical and Dental college as a computer operator in Admin department.

Be Honset, Sir/ Madam mentor is compulsory at your workplace. Most companies worried about there weakness then they haire mentors to ask what problems employees facing then company make sure to solve that problem such as i expect to you that Give me gaudieline about this new job so i can perform well.

Sir, The purpose of this letter that if you have time on upcoming thursday then we arranage the mentoring session.In this session we will discuss about the problems I face at workplace.

I will wait for your responces

Yours faithfully

M.Yaseen Malik

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You cover the three requested points: you outline your education and seven years of work experience, say you want guidance to perform well, and propose meeting on Thursday. These details make the letter relevant and give the mentor a basic introduction. However, the request for help is partly obscured by a general explanation of why companies use mentors, and the meeting suggestion is not specific about a time or place. The opening “Dear Sir/Madam” also does not address the mentor personally, despite being given their details. Develop the practical points more directly—for example, identify a particular skill or workplace challenge you want advice on, and suggest a time and location for the first meeting.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The letter has a recognisable sequence: introduction and background, expectations of the mentor, then a meeting proposal and closing. Paragraph breaks help distinguish these stages, and phrases such as “after that” and “In this session” guide the reader. However, the progression is sometimes interrupted by the broad discussion beginning “Most companies worried about there weakness,” which does not connect smoothly to your personal request. Some links are also unclear, particularly “I am member of telephone operator's office” and the transition into the meeting proposal. Keep each paragraph focused on one task point and use clearer links between your experience, the support you need, and the proposed meeting.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some relevant workplace vocabulary, including “mentor,” “career,” “Admin department,” “computer operator,” and “guideline,” so the reader can understand the general purpose of the letter. However, the range is limited and several spelling and word-choice errors make parts difficult to interpret, such as “writting,” “serive,” “haire,” and “responces.” Some expressions are also unnatural or imprecise: “member of telephone operator's office” and “make sure to solve that problem” do not clearly express your role or the support you expect. Choose standard workplace collocations and check spelling carefully. More precise terms for your responsibilities and the advice you want would make the letter clearer and more professional.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple statements and longer sentences, including a sentence explaining your education and work history and a conditional proposal beginning “if you have time on upcoming thursday.” However, the range is limited, and errors in verb forms, articles, agreement, and sentence construction occur frequently. For example, “I recently join this company” needs a past-tense form, while “My name Muhammad Yaseen Malik” is missing a verb. The long sentence beginning “Most companies worried” also has unclear clause structure, and punctuation is inconsistent, with missing spaces after full stops. Practise building accurate short sentences first, then combine related ideas using controlled clauses such as “I would appreciate your advice on…”

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