Band 6.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.5 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-09-26

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

All new employees at your workplace have a mentor - an experienced colleague who gives them advice and support in their career. As a new employee, you have been given details of your mentor.

Write a letter to introduce yourself to your new mentor. In your letter

• give a brief outline of your previous studies and work experience

• explain what help you hope your mentor can give

• suggest arrangements for a first meeting with your mentor

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear....... ,

Student answer (Band 6.5)

Dear Rasha,

My name is Kulwinder. Our employer told me that you are my mentor on this work so I am writing this letter to introduce myself to let you know about myself. I did master's in Science and i had worked as a lecturer in Physics at Miri Piri Khalsa College.

I need your support to get to know the experience about school age children. I wanted to let you that i am less familiar with that age group because i used to teach college students. I am eager to learn about how to make a program planning, schedule summer activities, their personal behaviour etc.

I would like to know about the location, time and date to meet as well as discuss on some other programs those will be helful for me to support you and the students for their good growth in studies.

Thank you for your understanding and time.

I am waiting to hear from you.

your sincerely,

Kulwinder Kaur

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 7.0

Kulwinder covers all bullet points required by the task prompt. She successfully introduces herself to her new mentor Rasha, gives a brief outline of her previous studies by mentioning that she did a master's in Science, and outlines her work experience as a lecturer in Physics at Miri Piri Khalsa College. Furthermore, she clearly explains what help she hopes to receive, such as learning about school-age children, program planning, and summer activities. Finally, she suggests arrangements for a first meeting by asking about the location, time, and date. The tone is appropriate for a semi-formal workplace letter, and all requirements are met well. Therefore, this performance aligns closely with Band 7.0 descriptors.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.5

The letter is logically organised with a clear beginning, middle, and end, following standard letter conventions. Paragraphing is utilised effectively to separate the introduction, the request for mentorship, and the meeting arrangements. Cohesive devices such as 'so', 'because', and 'as well as' are used appropriately to connect ideas, though some transitions feel slightly basic. Referencing is mostly clear, such as 'that age group' referring back to 'school age children'. While the logical progression is clear throughout, the cohesion occasionally feels a bit mechanical rather than fully flexible, which places this response comfortably at Band 6.5 or 7.0. A score of 6.5 accurately captures the straightforward yet functional layout.

Lexical Resource: Band 6.0

Kulwinder demonstrates an adequate range of vocabulary for the task. She correctly uses terms related to education and work, such as 'employer', 'mentor', 'lecturer', and 'program planning'. However, there are some noticeable vocabulary choices and minor inaccuracies, such as 'on this work' instead of 'at work' or 'for this role', and 'discuss on some other programs' instead of 'discuss some other programs'. There are also minor spelling and typographical issues like 'helful' instead of 'helpful'. Less common lexical items are attempted with some awareness of style, but occasional inaccuracies keep the score at Band 6.0.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 6.0

The response features a mix of simple and complex sentence forms, such as 'Our employer told me that you are my mentor on this work so I am writing this letter to introduce myself...'. There are several grammatical errors and awkward phrasings throughout the text, including 'did master's in Science' (missing an article), 'i had worked' (past perfect used unnecessarily where simple past 'worked' is better), and 'I am waiting to hear from you' (though common, 'I look forward to hearing from you' is more natural). Punctuation and capitalization errors also appear, such as lower-case 'i'. These errors do not impede communication, but they occur frequently enough to warrant a Band 6.0.

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