Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-09-30

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

All new employees at your workplace have a mentor - an experienced colleague who gives them advice and support in their career. As a new employee, you have been given details of your mentor.

Write a letter to introduce yourself to your new mentor. In your letter

• give a brief outline of your previous studies and work experience

• explain what help you hope your mentor can give

• suggest arrangements for a first meeting with your mentor

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear....... ,

Student answer (Band 6.0)

Dear Kamal,

I am glad to know that you will be my mentor who will helping me out in my work and task that will be set up.I am Alisheeba Tribhuwan a new member to the operations department and, i shall be reporting to Mr.Rohit Gupta likewise. My employee id is 3127 and has been designated as a Community Manager.

I have pursued my master's in management and hospitality.I have recently completed a course of property and event management which adds on training and certification in RERA examination. I am also an International singer and has been certified by the famous South Korean school of music.

Kamal, i am sure that i have a lot of questions and queries ready regarding the operations and process followed in our organisation. listing my basic queries are as follows :

1. The KRA and KPI strategies.

2. The quaterly Rewards and Recognition cycle.

3. Benifits of Multi-tasking.

I would request you to please help me with your available time next week. So, that i can arrange a one on one for my training purposes and an absolute help for my excellence in work.

I am available every second half of the day that is from 12:00 pm onwards.Kamal , i am looking forward for all your help and guidances.I am sure to learn and grasp all the process well. Positively waiting to hear from you.

Kind Regards,

Sheeba

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.5

The letter fully addresses all three bullet points required in the task prompt. You successfully provide an outline of your previous studies and work experience, mentioning your master's in management and hospitality as well as your recent property and event management certification. Furthermore, you clearly explain the help you hope to receive by listing specific queries regarding KRAs, KPIs, and rewards cycles. Finally, you suggest appropriate arrangements for your first meeting by proposing times next week and stating your availability. The tone is suitably polite and professional for a workplace letter to a mentor. All parts of the task are well covered and clearly developed, earning a strong band score.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

Your letter is logically organised with a clear overarching progression from introduction to background, specific questions, and finally meeting arrangements. You use paragraphing appropriately to separate different themes, such as grouping your background in one section and your queries in numbered bullet points. However, some minor mechanical cohesion issues occur, such as the fragment 'So, that i can arrange...' and occasional capitalization slips like 'i' instead of 'I'. Despite these small issues, the overall arrangement is coherent, and ideas flow logically from one paragraph to the next, easily fulfilling the requirements for Band 6.5 to 7.0.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You demonstrate a sufficient range of vocabulary appropriate for a workplace setting, successfully employing terms like 'operations department', 'Community Manager', 'certification', and 'Multi-tasking'. There are some minor lexical inaccuracies and spelling errors, such as 'quaterly' instead of 'quarterly' and 'Benifits' instead of 'Benefits'. You also make some word choice errors, such as writing 'adds on training' rather than 'adds on training' or 'includes'. Nevertheless, your vocabulary is varied enough to convey your precise meaning without impeding communication, representing a solid Band 6 performance.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

You use a mix of simple and complex sentence forms throughout the letter, such as relative clauses and conditional structures. There are several grammatical errors and punctuation slips, including lowercase 'i' pronouns ('i shall be reporting', 'i am sure'), missing commas, and punctuation errors around conjunctions (e.g., 'next week. So, that i can...'). Additionally, there are minor agreement issues, such as 'has been certified' when referring to plural subjects or 'queries is as follows'. These errors do not impede communication, but their frequency prevents you from reaching higher bands where error-free sentences dominate.

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