Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-10-05

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

All new employees at your workplace have a mentor - an experienced colleague who gives them advice and support in their career. As a new employee, you have been given details of your mentor.

Write a letter to introduce yourself to your new mentor. In your letter

• give a brief outline of your previous studies and work experience

• explain what help you hope your mentor can give

• suggest arrangements for a first meeting with your mentor

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear....... ,

Student answer (Band 6.0)

Dear Jay,

I hope you are doing good. I am Tina, a new employee at your workplace and will be working under you guidelines. I am a graduate from Marketing course. I have previously worked for two years in retails. I was employed as store associate in a retail shop named as Fida. My major duties were to help in merchandising, work as a cashier and assist customers.

After I passed my interview, Manager John told me to take your help as you were assigned as my mentor. I would like you to help me to give guidance about the work. Along with it, the time frame within which you want me to complete my task.

Furthermore, I would suggest you arrange a first meeting with yourself, where you can let me know about all of my duties and I can make the notes side by side, which will help me in the long run.

I will be looking forward for the date and time for the meeting.

Yours Thankfully,

Rita

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

The response successfully addresses all parts of the letter writing task by introducing the sender, outlining her previous studies and retail experience, explaining what help she hopes to receive, and suggesting arrangements for a first meeting. However, some areas are developed more fully than others. While the work background and meeting suggestions are clear, the section explaining the desired help from the mentor is somewhat under-developed and could benefit from further expansion regarding specific career goals or skill development. The tone is generally appropriate for a professional workplace communication, and all bullet points from the prompt are adequately covered, keeping the response firmly within the requirements for this level.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.5

The letter presents a coherent overall arrangement with clear paragraphing that separates the introduction, background, expectations, and meeting proposal logically. Ideas are generally easy to follow, and the progression of the letter makes sense for an introductory message to a mentor. However, cohesion relies on some mechanical or basic devices, and referencing is not always completely clear, such as the abrupt transition in the second paragraph involving Manager John. While paragraphing is used sufficiently to structure the text, pushing this criterion further would require more flexible and sophisticated cohesive devices to seamlessly link sentences and ideas together without relying on repetitive connectors.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

The student uses an adequate range of vocabulary suitable for the task, successfully incorporating terms related to employment such as 'store associate', 'merchandising', and 'cashier'. There are, however, noticeable word choice and collocation errors, such as 'graduate from Marketing course' instead of 'graduate in marketing', and 'working under you guidelines' instead of 'your guidelines'. Words are also occasionally misused, such as 'retails' instead of 'retail'. These inaccuracies do not seriously impede communication, but they restrict the lexical score because less common vocabulary is attempted with persistent errors. To reach a higher band, the writer needs to demonstrate greater precision in word choice and natural collocation.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

The writing demonstrates a mix of simple and complex sentence forms, effectively using clauses to convey background information and requests. There are some noticeable errors in grammar and punctuation, such as missing articles ('take your help', 'make the notes'), preposition issues ('help me to give guidance about'), and slight tense or agreement slips like 'I will be looking forward for the date'. Fortunately, these errors rarely impede communication and the meaning remains clear throughout. The punctuation is generally functional, and simple sentences are usually well-controlled. To achieve a higher band, the writer must produce a greater frequency of error-free complex sentences and eliminate recurring minor structural slips.

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