Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-10-05

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

All new employees at your workplace have a mentor - an experienced colleague who gives them advice and support in their career. As a new employee, you have been given details of your mentor.

Write a letter to introduce yourself to your new mentor. In your letter

• give a brief outline of your previous studies and work experience

• explain what help you hope your mentor can give

• suggest arrangements for a first meeting with your mentor

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear....... ,

Student answer (Band 5.0)

Dear sir,

I am happy to see you as my new mentor. I want to share some details with you about myself. These information will help to maintain a strong bond between mentor and employee.

I am working in this company as electrical engineer. I completed my matric from APS. After inter I decided went to electrical field. I passed my 4 years course of electrical engineer from Lahore College.

As a mentor I expected some favor from you as other mentor give their employees. you completed your study from abroad and have more experience than me. I want your suggestion when i complete my each task. Furthermore you should take responsibility of our lunch and take serious notice when something uncertain happens.

I suggest we arrange a face to face meeting in next week. we discuss all matters belonging to company. It help us to maintain good bond and cooperation. I am eagerly waiting your response and first meeting with you.

Your faithfully,

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

The response addresses the prompt only partially, which places it at this level. While all three bullet points are mentioned, the ideas are limited and under-developed. For instance, the outline of previous studies and work experience is vague, mentioning only 'electrical engineer' and 'Lahore College' without sufficient context. Furthermore, the explanation of what help is expected includes inappropriate or unclear requests, such as asking the mentor to 'take responsibility of our lunch', which detracts from the professional tone required for a workplace letter. Although the suggestion for a meeting is present, the overall development lacks clarity and appropriate depth.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

There is some basic organisation in the letter, but it lacks a clear overall progression. The response is divided into paragraphs corresponding to the bullet points, which shows an attempt at structuring the letter. However, cohesive devices are frequently inadequate, inaccurate, or overused. For example, transitional phrases are missing or poorly implemented, such as jumping abruptly between topics without smooth links. Referencing is also occasionally unclear, as seen in the phrase 'These information', which disrupts the logical flow and makes the connections between sentences mechanical and repetitive.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

The vocabulary used is limited and minimally adequate for the task. The writer attempts some less common vocabulary, but noticeable errors in word choice and collocation cause some difficulty for the reader. Examples include 'I decided went to electrical field' and 'expected some favor from you as other mentor give their employees'. There are also issues with word form and lexical control, such as using 'These information' instead of 'This information', and awkward phrasing like 'eagerly waiting your response'. These lexical inaccuracies restrict the precision and appropriateness of the communication.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

The response demonstrates a very limited range of sentence structures, relying primarily on simple sentences with frequent attempts at complex forms that are often faulty. There are frequent grammatical errors throughout the text that cause difficulty for the reader, including errors in verb forms and tenses (e.g., 'I passed my 4 years course', 'you completed your study'), missing articles (e.g., 'as electrical engineer'), and incorrect prepositions (e.g., 'meeting in next week'). Punctuation and capitalization errors, such as lowercase 'we' at the beginning of sentences, also reflect a lack of firm control over basic grammatical conventions.

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