Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-10-06

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

All new employees at your workplace have a mentor - an experienced colleague who gives them advice and support in their career. As a new employee, you have been given details of your mentor.

Write a letter to introduce yourself to your new mentor. In your letter

• give a brief outline of your previous studies and work experience

• explain what help you hope your mentor can give

• suggest arrangements for a first meeting with your mentor

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear....... ,

Student answer (Band 5.5)

Dear sir,

I am writing to introduce my self as I have recently joined the company and i have been informed that you will be my mentor. i am very pleased to have new opportunity learn from your experience.

I completed my bechelor degree in science and master degree in MBA in marketing subject and i have one year experience as teacher. As i chose marketing subject i have keen interest in digital matketing and social media,content creation. So, i exited to develop my career in this field.

As i new in this industry i am trying to learning new things, handle the responsibility and behave in well the workplace environment. I would be undarstand your advice on devloping my professional skill and knowledge for my career growth. I am greatful for your feedbak given next few months.

Would be posiible to our first meeting sometime next week. i am avilavle on next week tuesday or thursday. I am happy when you are avilablity time and can also meet. our meeting will be in cafeteria in company whenevre you free please tell me the time .

I am looking forward to meeting with you and learn your experience.

reagards,

Cheta

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

The response addresses all parts of the task satisfactorily, fulfilling the basic requirements of a letter to a mentor. You successfully introduced yourself, provided an outline of your academic background and previous work experience, and explained what kind of help you hope to receive, such as guidance on developing professional skills. Furthermore, you suggested arrangements for a first meeting by proposing days next week and a location. However, some parts are more fully developed than others; for instance, the explanation of your previous studies and work experience is somewhat brief and limited in detail, and the meeting arrangements are a bit repetitive and unclear in places. To reach a higher level, all bullet points would need to be more thoroughly extended with fully developed, precise details and clearer planning.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The letter maintains a coherent overall arrangement with a clear paragraph structure that follows the logical stages of an introductory letter. There is a discernible progression from introducing yourself and your background to discussing your expectations and finally proposing a meeting. However, cohesion is at times mechanical or faulty due to repetitive phrasing, abrupt transitions between sentences, and occasional referencing issues, such as in the final paragraph where the time and location arrangements become slightly tangled. Paragraphing is used to separate ideas, but clearer cohesive devices and smoother logical links between sentences would improve the flow and overall readability of the text.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You demonstrate an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, attempting some less common words and industry-related terms such as 'digital marketing', 'content creation', and 'professional skill'. However, there are noticeable spelling and word choice errors throughout the text, including 'my self' instead of 'myself', 'bechelor' for 'bachelor', 'matketing' for 'marketing', 'exited' for 'excited', 'undarstand' for 'understand', 'greatful' for 'grateful', 'feedbak' for 'feedback', 'posiible' for 'possible', 'avilavle' for 'available', and 'avilablity' for 'availability'. These errors in spelling and word form do not completely impede communication, but they restrict the lexical score because they occur with some frequency and show limited control over less common vocabulary.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

The writing displays a mix of simple and complex sentence forms, attempting structures like subordinate clauses and compound sentences. However, there are some errors in grammar and punctuation throughout the text. These include missing capitalization at the beginning of sentences and for the pronoun 'I', punctuation omissions, incorrect article usage such as 'a new opportunity learn' instead of 'an opportunity to learn', and preposition errors like 'meet in cafeteria in company' instead of 'meet in the company cafeteria'. While these errors rarely impede communication and the meaning remains clear, the presence of these recurring grammatical slips and punctuation lapses keeps the grammar score at this level.

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