Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-10-07

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

All new employees at your workplace have a mentor - an experienced colleague who gives them advice and support in their career. As a new employee, you have been given details of your mentor.

Write a letter to introduce yourself to your new mentor. In your letter

• give a brief outline of your previous studies and work experience

• explain what help you hope your mentor can give

• suggest arrangements for a first meeting with your mentor

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear....... ,

Student answer (Band 6.0)

Dear Sir,

I hope you are doing good. I am writing this to intoduce myself as i have joined this company recently and i have come to know that you will be my mentor.

First, I would like to bring this into your knowledge that i am a fresh graduate from IMS BZU and i have done my MBA with a mojor in finance. I have learned time management and other interpersonal skills through different group projects during my studies. But as you know that I'll be under your mentoreship in this company, so, i look forward to learning different managerial and corporate skills in future from you.

I will be more than delighted to meet you before joining the company. I am available in afternoons and it would be great if meet over a lunch somewhere in coming days or whatever time suits you. I will be more than happy to fit in your schedule.

Looking forward to hearing from you soon.

Yours sincerely,

XYZ

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

You address all three requested points: you introduce yourself, describe your MBA studies and group-project experience, explain that you hope to develop managerial and corporate skills, and propose an afternoon lunch meeting. These details make the letter relevant and its purpose clear. However, the account of previous work experience is missing, and the help you want is described quite generally rather than through specific areas where your mentor could advise you. The meeting suggestion is also somewhat unclear because you say you would like to meet “before joining the company,” although you have already joined. Adding a brief work-history detail and specifying one or two practical goals would make the response more complete and developed.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.5

The letter has a clear overall sequence: introduction, background and expectations, meeting arrangements, and a closing. Paragraphing supports this progression, and phrases such as “First” and “Looking forward to hearing from you soon” help signal the stages of the message. The ideas are generally easy to follow, but some linking is mechanical or awkward, particularly “But as you know that” and “so,” which make the transition from your studies to your expectations less smooth. The meeting details also combine availability, a lunch suggestion, and flexibility in one long sentence. To strengthen the flow further, use more natural transitions and separate the meeting proposal into clearer, connected points.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use a suitable range of vocabulary for a professional introductory letter, including “fresh graduate,” “time management,” “interpersonal skills,” and “managerial and corporate skills.” The meaning is usually clear, but several spelling errors and unnatural expressions reduce precision, such as “intoduce,” “mojor,” and “mentoreship.” Phrases like “bring this into your knowledge” and “doing good” are also not natural choices in this context. These issues show that you can communicate the main ideas but need more accurate control of spelling, collocation, and formal register. Prefer familiar, natural professional expressions and proofread carefully for spelling.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 6.0

You use a mix of simple and more complex sentence forms, including the conditional-style request “it would be great if…” and the longer sentence explaining your studies and future goals. Most of the message remains understandable, but some grammatical errors occur. For example, “as i have joined” needs a capital “I,” and “it would be great if meet over a lunch” is missing a subject and uses an awkward article construction. The sentence beginning “But as you know that…” also has an unnecessary conjunction and “that.” The closing meeting sentence would be clearer as two shorter sentences. Continue practising complete clause structure, capitalization, and punctuation while retaining your attempts at varied sentences.

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