Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-10-07

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

All new employees at your workplace have a mentor - an experienced colleague who gives them advice and support in their career. As a new employee, you have been given details of your mentor.

Write a letter to introduce yourself to your new mentor. In your letter

• give a brief outline of your previous studies and work experience

• explain what help you hope your mentor can give

• suggest arrangements for a first meeting with your mentor

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear....... ,

Student answer (Band 5.0)

Dear Sir,

I hope you are having a wonderful day.

My name is Sneha amd I work in this company. I studies 12th in Secondary school amd then did a diploma in Computer science and now worked as a software engineer here. I really appreciate you as you come here to guide us regrding our career. My experience is that I learned a lot of things from this company and want to learn more. You can give me knowledge about software engineer pathways for abroad so I can try for more opportunities abroad for my job. I would also like to meet you to discuss more about this. Whenever you are free please let me know I will arrange a first meeting myself. As I wanted to learn a lot from you amd your guidance helps me a lot in my future as well. With the help of your support I can try for furthur opportunities.

With Regards

Sneha

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

You address all three required points: you introduce yourself, mention your education and current role, explain that you want advice about overseas career pathways, and propose meeting when your mentor is free. These details make the letter relevant and its purpose clear. However, the study and work history is brief and somewhat unclear: “I studies 12th in Secondary school” does not explain the qualification precisely, and “now worked as a software engineer here” leaves your previous work experience unspecified. Your request for guidance is relevant, but could be developed by naming a particular area, such as career planning or skills needed for overseas roles. A clearer, more specific account of your background and meeting proposal would make the response more complete.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

The ideas follow a broadly sensible order, moving from your introduction and background to the help you want and a possible meeting. However, the letter is presented as one continuous paragraph, so the different purposes are not clearly separated. Several links between ideas are also awkward or repetitive: “I would also like to meet you to discuss more about this” is followed by “As I wanted to learn a lot from you,” which repeats the request without advancing it. The final sentences repeat the hope for guidance and future opportunities. Use separate paragraphs for your background, request, and meeting arrangements, and connect each point with clear, natural transitions. This would make the progression easier to follow.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use vocabulary relevant to the workplace and career, including “mentor,” “career,” “software engineer,” and “opportunities abroad,” so the reader can understand your main aims. However, the range is limited and some phrases are imprecise or unnatural, such as “give me knowledge about software engineer pathways for abroad” and “I learned a lot of things from this company.” Spelling errors such as “amd,” “regrding,” and “furthur” also reduce accuracy. Aim for more natural collocations and precise wording—for example, “advise me on career pathways overseas” and “I have gained valuable experience at the company.” Proofreading spelling and choosing more specific terms would strengthen the letter’s professional tone.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

The response includes some attempts to combine ideas, for example, “so I can try for more opportunities abroad for my job,” and the overall meaning is generally understandable. However, verb forms and sentence construction are often inaccurate. “I studies 12th” should use a past-tense verb, while “now worked as a software engineer” needs a present-tense form such as “now work.” The sentence beginning “Whenever you are free” joins two independent ideas without suitable punctuation, and “As I wanted to learn a lot from you” is an incomplete dependent clause. Use a mix of accurate simple sentences and carefully formed complex sentences, and check tense consistency, subject–verb agreement, and sentence boundaries.

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