Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-10-08

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

All new employees at your workplace have a mentor - an experienced colleague who gives them advice and support in their career. As a new employee, you have been given details of your mentor.

Write a letter to introduce yourself to your new mentor. In your letter

• give a brief outline of your previous studies and work experience

• explain what help you hope your mentor can give

• suggest arrangements for a first meeting with your mentor

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear....... ,

Student answer (Band 5.0)

Dear Menotor,

I am a new employees this company.I join this company last week.I am very happy for join this company.I wish you are all well.

I finished my syudy last year.I study in social science and I have a first class resuit.I was some part time job when i stady.I also work a small company.I have all most one year job experience.

I join this company for cash counter.A havr no idea in this work.pls give me some heip for this work.I want to know how to use this cash counter.I have some basic for compurter.buy A do not use this machien.and helps me for my work.

I want to meet you. I arrangement a meeting with you.pls give me some time.I will reaiy happy to visit you.

thank you for your time or considaration.

your sinceriy,

Sharmin Sultana

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

You address the three main purposes: you mention your studies and work experience, ask for help with the cash counter, and request a meeting. However, the details are limited, so the background and the support you need are only partly developed. For example, “I study in social science” and “I have all most one year job experience” give a basic outline, but you could clarify what your previous job involved. Your meeting request, “pls give me some time,” does not suggest a specific day, time, or place. The response is also 10 words below the required minimum of 150, which limits the opportunity to develop these points. Add relevant detail and propose a practical meeting arrangement.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The letter has a recognisable structure: you introduce yourself, describe your background, explain your need for support, and close with a meeting request. Separate paragraphs help the reader identify these topics. However, progression within paragraphs is sometimes unclear, and several short statements are placed together without clear links, such as “I join this company for cash counter. A havr no idea in this work.” The repeated use of “I” also makes the letter feel list-like. Use simple linking phrases to show how your studies and experience relate to your new role, and connect the request for guidance to the specific skills you want to learn. A clearer sequence for arranging the meeting would also improve the flow.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

You use some relevant vocabulary for the situation, including “mentor,” “social science,” “job experience,” and “cash counter,” so the reader can understand the general subject. However, the range is limited and several spelling errors or inaccurate word choices make parts difficult to interpret, for example “Menotor,” “resuit,” “compurter,” and “machien.” Informal forms such as “pls” are not suitable for a professional letter. Choose standard spelling and more precise workplace expressions, such as “cash register” or “point-of-sale system,” and describe the help you need with phrases like “training in operating the till.” Proofreading and learning common collocations for work correspondence would make your message clearer and more professional.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

Most of your sentences use basic subject–verb patterns, and the reader can follow the main message, but grammatical errors occur frequently and sometimes make relationships between ideas unclear. Examples include “I am a new employees,” “I join this company last week,” and “I was some part time job,” which show problems with agreement, tense, and sentence construction. The request “I arrangement a meeting with you” also does not form a correct sentence. The response relies heavily on short simple statements, with little accurate use of longer structures. Practise past-tense forms for your studies and previous work, and use complete, correctly formed requests—for example, “Could we meet next week to discuss training?”

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