Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-10-10

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

All new employees at your workplace have a mentor - an experienced colleague who gives them advice and support in their career. As a new employee, you have been given details of your mentor.

Write a letter to introduce yourself to your new mentor. In your letter

• give a brief outline of your previous studies and work experience

• explain what help you hope your mentor can give

• suggest arrangements for a first meeting with your mentor

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear....... ,

Student answer (Band 5.0)

Dear, i am newly hired in your department , everyone have their mentor and an experienced colleague but my mentor is you because i like your working way, i am a very honest, reliable and hardworking person and i have done my studies last year after that i am working in banking sector now i am here as a new accountant ,

i hope you like my nature and working style and push me to elaborate more new things which will give me big opportunity to go up in my career,

therefore i would like to meet you in person that you can know me how i am and how i will be beneficial for you also.

i will be very thank full to you if you meet me once.

Yours faithfully

FARAZ

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5

You make a relevant attempt to introduce yourself and mention your studies, banking experience, current accountant role, the support you want, and a wish to meet. However, the task is only partially addressed: “I have done my studies last year” gives no detail about what you studied, and the help you hope to receive is expressed vaguely as being pushed to “elaborate more new things.” The meeting request is also not a practical arrangement, since you do not suggest a time, place, or way to coordinate. The response is 17 words below the required minimum, which further limits the development of these points. Add specific background, clear mentoring goals, and a concrete meeting proposal.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The ideas follow a broadly sensible order: you introduce yourself, describe your background, explain what you hope for, and ask to meet. The separate paragraphs help distinguish these points. However, the opening is a long run-on sentence, and the links between ideas are sometimes unclear; for example, “therefore” does not clearly connect the request to the preceding explanation. The letter also moves from saying the mentor is assigned to you to saying “because i like your working way,” which makes the relationship sound confusing. Use shorter sentences and clearer transitions, and organise the letter into a greeting, background, mentoring aims, and meeting arrangements.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use enough basic vocabulary to communicate the main topic, including “reliable,” “hardworking,” “career,” and “accountant.” There are also attempts to express professional qualities and ambitions. However, the range is limited, and several phrases are unnatural or imprecise, such as “working way,” “elaborate more new things,” and “go up in my career.” “I like your working way” is also an unclear basis for introducing yourself to a mentor. Choose more natural workplace expressions and specify the skills or knowledge you want to develop. Check spelling and word forms as well, including “thank full,” which should be written as one word.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

The response attempts to combine ideas using clauses such as “that you can know me,” but sentence structures are limited and often faulty. The opening joins several independent ideas with commas, making it difficult to follow. There are frequent errors in agreement and verb forms, including “everyone have” and “i have done my studies last year”; the latter needs a tense that fits a completed past event. Articles and sentence boundaries also need attention, as in “as a new accountant” within the long opening sentence. Capitalise “I,” use full stops to separate complete thoughts, and practise accurate past-tense and subject–verb agreement patterns.

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