Band 6.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.5 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-10-11

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

All new employees at your workplace have a mentor - an experienced colleague who gives them advice and support in their career. As a new employee, you have been given details of your mentor.

Write a letter to introduce yourself to your new mentor. In your letter

• give a brief outline of your previous studies and work experience

• explain what help you hope your mentor can give

• suggest arrangements for a first meeting with your mentor

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear....... ,

Student answer (Band 6.5)

Dear Mr. Khan,

I am writing to report you as a new empoyee, under your mentorship. I am a Chemical Engineering graduate of University of Engineering and Technology, Lahore with an overall CGPA of 3.500/4.000. During my studies, i have actively participated in co-curricular activities i.e Seminars, Conferences, Entrepreneural competitions. Not to mention, i have worked as an intern for 4 weeks in Crescent Bahuman Limited & Fauji Fertilizer Bin Qasim Limited in Hafizabad and Karachi respectively.

It'll be an honour for me to work under your leadership. Therefore, i seek thorough Hands-on experience regarding Plantsite activities and a good command on Engineering softwares pertaining to my responsibilities. I have also heard about your remarkable achievements in techno-economic analysis of Plant equipments, therefore, if i will get the chance to work on that particular analysis quarterly under your guidance, it will be a great milestone in my career.

In order gain insightful experience, i am thrilled to join as asap. Therefore, i request you to arrange some space in your hectic schedule for our initial meet-up. I am eaderly waiting for your response.

Best Regards,

MUHAMMAD ADEEL ASHRAF,

EXECUTIVE ENGINEER.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.5

You address all three required points: you outline your Chemical Engineering studies and internships, explain that you want practical plant-site and software guidance, and request an initial meeting. The specific reference to your mentor’s techno-economic analysis also makes the letter feel tailored. These details show relevant development, but the help you hope to receive is more fully explained than the meeting arrangements: you ask for time without suggesting a day, time, or format. The opening phrase “report you as a new employee” also does not clearly express the intended introduction. To strengthen the response, state your purpose naturally and propose a practical meeting option, while briefly clarifying how the requested guidance relates to your new role.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 7.0

The letter has a clear overall progression: it introduces your background, moves to the support you hope to receive, and ends with a meeting request. Paragraphing helps distinguish these stages, and linking expressions such as “During my studies” and “Therefore” guide the reader through your points. The sequence is logical, although “Therefore” is used repeatedly and the connection between wanting to join “as asap” and requesting a meeting is not fully clear. The closing also shifts abruptly from the request to “Best Regards” and a formal job title. For a more polished progression, use a wider range of natural transitions and make the final paragraph focus directly on a proposed meeting arrangement and a courteous closing.

Lexical Resource: Band 6.5

You use a suitable range of work-related vocabulary, including “Chemical Engineering,” “co-curricular activities,” “hands-on experience,” and “techno-economic analysis.” These choices communicate your background and professional interests, and the specific technical terms add precision. However, some attempted formal or less common expressions are inaccurate or unnatural: “report you as a new employee,” “Plantsite activities,” and “initial meet-up” do not fit the intended meaning or register well. There are also spelling and form errors, including “empoyee,” “Entrepreneural,” and “eaderly.” Choose conventional professional collocations and check spelling and capitalisation; this would make your vocabulary more consistently precise while retaining the useful technical detail.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 6.0

You attempt a mix of sentence forms, including longer sentences that connect your studies, activities, and work experience, and most of the message remains understandable. Some grammatical errors nevertheless reduce accuracy. For example, “In order gain” is missing “to,” and “if i will get the chance” uses an unsuitable future form in the conditional; write “if I get the chance.” In “I am a Chemical Engineering graduate of University of Engineering and Technology,” the article before the university name is missing. Capitalisation and punctuation are also inconsistent, as in lowercase “i” and the comma after “Best Regards.” Review articles, conditional structures, and sentence punctuation, then proofread for consistent capitalisation. More accurate control of these patterns would improve the letter’s professional clarity.

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