Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-10-12

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

All new employees at your workplace have a mentor - an experienced colleague who gives them advice and support in their career. As a new employee, you have been given details of your mentor.

Write a letter to introduce yourself to your new mentor. In your letter

• give a brief outline of your previous studies and work experience

• explain what help you hope your mentor can give

• suggest arrangements for a first meeting with your mentor

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear....... ,

Student answer (Band 5.0)

Dear Sir/Madam,

Myself Ahad and i recently joined your company as a fresher , I have completed my studies from America in IT after that I return to my hometown to begin my professional career

As you know I'm fresher and having not much experience in this field therefor I hope under your mentorship I will learned alot and gain much experience as I can

However , I wanted to have a words with you to share my fear and multiple thoughts or confusions as when I start I will not facing these disturbing situation during my work experience

So therefor can you please have a time so that we can arrange meeting one to one

I will share with you all I have my degree and internship experience througout which I learn alot beacuse as a result we can build strong communication between us and also understand each other

Best Regards,

Ahad Ali

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

You address the three requested points: you mention studying IT in America and having internship experience, say you hope to gain experience and discuss your concerns, and ask to arrange a meeting. However, the details are limited, so the reader learns little about your previous work or what specific guidance you need. The meeting request is also vague: “can you please have a time” does not suggest a day, time, or format. The opening “Dear Sir/Madam” is not well suited to writing to a named mentor whose details you have received. Add a brief, specific account of your studies and experience, identify one or two areas where you want support, and propose a practical meeting arrangement.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The letter follows a broadly sensible order, moving from your introduction and background to the support you want and a meeting request. This gives the reader a basic sense of purpose. However, the progression is weakened by long, loosely connected sentences and repeated linking expressions such as “therefor” and “as a result.” The sentence beginning “I will share with you all I have my degree…” combines several ideas, making the relationship between your documents, internship learning, and communication unclear. Separate the content into short paragraphs, with one main purpose in each, and use clear links such as “In my previous role…” and “Would you be available…?”

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use enough basic vocabulary to communicate the main purpose, including “professional career,” “mentorship,” “internship experience,” and “communication.” There are also attempts to express more specific feelings, such as “fear” and “confusions.” However, the range is limited and several choices or combinations sound unnatural, which sometimes makes your meaning less clear. For example, “have a words with you” and “disturbing situation” do not express your intended meaning naturally, while “fresher” is not the most suitable term in this context. Choose precise workplace expressions and check spelling and word forms, especially in “throughout,” “because,” and “a lot.”

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt to connect ideas in longer sentences, but control is inconsistent, and errors frequently make parts of the letter difficult to follow. For example, “I recently joined your company as a fresher” is preceded by the incomplete construction “Myself Ahad,” while “I return to my hometown” needs a consistent past tense. In “I will learned” and “I will not facing,” the verb forms are incorrect; use “will learn” and “will not face.” There are also problems with articles, plurals, and punctuation, as in “have a words” and the spaces before commas. Practise accurate simple sentences first, then build longer sentences using one clear clause relationship at a time.

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