Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-10-14

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

All new employees at your workplace have a mentor - an experienced colleague who gives them advice and support in their career. As a new employee, you have been given details of your mentor.

Write a letter to introduce yourself to your new mentor. In your letter

• give a brief outline of your previous studies and work experience

• explain what help you hope your mentor can give

• suggest arrangements for a first meeting with your mentor

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear....... ,

Student answer (Band 5.0)

Dear Mrs smith,

I glad to write this letter about getting job in your company which is blue ocean. It my pleasent you offer me a seat of accountant.

Firstly, i completed my education in university canada west as a business management also i had two years experience of reciptionsit in the hospital. Moreover, i get job in your business as a reciptionsit and it is great opportunity for me, But i want some help from you as a mentor please guide me about how your business will run like what responsibilty should i take as a reciptionsit because all business have different critiers so please guide me. finally, i want to arrange first meeting with you where you will provide all detail of you business and give instruction so i can not make any mistake in my work. I hope this letter you will recieve and i will wait for you response.

Your sincerely,

ggk

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You make a relevant attempt to cover the three requested points: you mention your studies and hospital experience, ask for guidance about your responsibilities, and request a first meeting. However, the details are not always clear or consistent. You describe being offered an accountant position, then say you have joined as a receptionist, so the mentor may not know your actual role. Your request for help is relevant but broad; identify a specific area, such as learning the company’s procedures or developing accounting skills. The meeting request would be more complete if you suggested a day, time, or place. These underdeveloped and unclear details limit how fully the letter addresses the task.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

The letter has a recognisable sequence: an introduction, background and request for support, a meeting suggestion, and a closing. Linking expressions such as “Firstly,” “Moreover,” and “finally” help signal movement between points. However, most of the content is placed in one long paragraph, and the progression within it is difficult to follow. The repeated use of “please guide me” and the long sentence beginning “Moreover, i get job…” combine several ideas without clear boundaries. Separate your background, mentoring needs, and meeting arrangements into distinct paragraphs, and use shorter sentences with clear references. This would make the organisation easier to follow and reduce the mechanical feel of the linking words.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some vocabulary relevant to the situation, including “mentor,” “experience,” “responsibility,” and “opportunity,” so the reader can identify the main subject of the letter. However, the range is limited and several word choices or collocations are inaccurate, which sometimes makes the meaning unclear. For example, “offer me a seat of accountant” does not naturally describe a job offer, while “how your business will run” is less precise than asking about workplace procedures. There are also noticeable spelling errors, including “pleasent,” “reciptionsit,” and “responsibilty.” Build a bank of workplace phrases and check spelling carefully; more precise wording would help you explain your role and requests clearly.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

You attempt to connect ideas in longer sentences, for example when explaining your experience and asking what responsibilities you should take. However, these complex attempts are often faulty, and basic sentence patterns also contain frequent errors. Examples include “I glad” instead of “I am glad,” “It my pleasent” instead of a complete sentence, and “i completed my education … as a business management,” where the structure does not clearly express what you studied. Capitalisation and punctuation are also inconsistent, particularly in the long sentence joined by “Moreover” and “But.” Practise accurate simple sentences first, then combine them using conjunctions and full stops. Check verb forms, articles, and sentence boundaries before sending the letter.

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