Band 6.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.5 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-10-14

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

All new employees at your workplace have a mentor - an experienced colleague who gives them advice and support in their career. As a new employee, you have been given details of your mentor.

Write a letter to introduce yourself to your new mentor. In your letter

• give a brief outline of your previous studies and work experience

• explain what help you hope your mentor can give

• suggest arrangements for a first meeting with your mentor

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear....... ,

Student answer (Band 6.5)

Dear Sir,

I am writing this letter to introduce myself as a new employee. As I know you are my new mentor at this organization, I want to inform you that I had completed my higher degree of DPT and since now I have been working as researcher and clinician. I have an experience of four years in research writing.

Furthermore, I hope that, I would learn more after working under your supervision because you have 15 years of experience in research work. In addition to this, I hope I will improve my skills regarding statistical analysis of data.

Moreover, I wants to ask you about your availability at a office because I want to arrange a meeting with you to know about my upcoming tasks. Please let me confirm your time and day as I know you are very busy work schedule.

I hope you would help me and I am waiting for you reply for meeting time with me.

Yours Sincerely,

Nosheen.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.5

You address all three requested points: you introduce yourself, mention your DPT qualification and four years of research-writing experience, explain that you want guidance with research and statistical analysis, and ask to arrange a meeting. These details make the letter relevant and give it a clear purpose. The request for help is reasonably specific, but your studies and work history are compressed into one sentence, and the meeting proposal does not offer a possible day, time, or format. The closing also repeats your hope for help rather than adding useful information. To develop the response further, briefly clarify your previous role or studies and suggest a concrete meeting option while inviting your mentor to propose another time.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 7.0

The letter has a clear progression: introduction and background, expectations of the mentor, a meeting request, and a closing. Paragraphing supports this sequence, and linking expressions such as “Furthermore,” “In addition to this,” and “Moreover” help signal the stages of your message. The organisation is easy to follow, though the repeated formal transitions make the links somewhat formulaic, and the final paragraph largely repeats the request and hope for assistance. The reference to the mentor’s availability is understandable, but the meeting arrangements could connect more smoothly to a specific suggestion. Use fewer, more natural connectors and make each paragraph add a distinct piece of information.

Lexical Resource: Band 6.0

You use a suitable range of workplace and professional vocabulary, including “mentor,” “supervision,” “research,” “clinician,” and “statistical analysis.” These choices communicate your background and goals clearly, and you attempt some more specific language rather than relying only on basic terms. However, several phrases are not natural collocations or are imprecise, such as “higher degree of DPT,” “research writing,” and “a office.” “Busy work schedule” also needs a more natural construction. These choices do not prevent understanding, but they limit precision and fluency. Aim to learn common professional combinations and check whether each noun phrase sounds idiomatic in context.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

You attempt both simple and more extended sentences, and the overall meaning remains clear. However, some errors in verb forms, agreement, articles, and sentence construction reduce accuracy. For example, “I wants to ask” should be “I want to ask,” while “I had completed” is not the natural tense for describing a qualification you already hold. The phrase “Please let me confirm your time and day” also does not express the intended request accurately; a clearer structure would be “Please let me know which day and time suits you.” There are also article and punctuation issues, including “at a office” and the comma after “I hope that.” Practise accurate present and past forms and proofread sentence patterns.

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