Band 7.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 7.0 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-10-14

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

All new employees at your workplace have a mentor - an experienced colleague who gives them advice and support in their career. As a new employee, you have been given details of your mentor.

Write a letter to introduce yourself to your new mentor. In your letter

• give a brief outline of your previous studies and work experience

• explain what help you hope your mentor can give

• suggest arrangements for a first meeting with your mentor

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear....... ,

Student answer (Band 7.0)

Dear Bryce,

I am writing this to give you a brief insight into my welding career because you have been assigned my official mentor.

I chose welding as a career as I am a hands on person and loves instant results, I went to a welding school for a two year diploma and worked on a local fabrication job for one year before coming to BWXT.

Since this is my first time working for a nuclear company which demands high precision and accuracy across different welding processes. I hope under your mentorship I will be able to hone my skills further and understand what it takes to be a nuclear welder. While I do know practical skills matter the most, I wish to know more about the nuclear codes and theoretical knowledge behind each process to minimize any potential future errors.

We can do a scheduled meeting this weekend at the utility room with the rest of the new hires and can kickstart our introductory orientation.

Yours sincerely,

Ranbir

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.5

You address all three requested points and keep the letter relevant to your new mentor. Your background is specific: you mention a two-year welding diploma and a year at a local fabrication job, and you explain that you want guidance on nuclear welding, codes, and theory. The request for help is particularly clear. However, the proposed meeting is less fully developed: “this weekend at the utility room” gives a time and place, but does not check whether Bryce is available or offer an alternative. The opening also focuses on your welding career rather than directly introducing yourself. These details show solid coverage, while fuller development and a more considerate, specific meeting proposal would make the response more complete and polished.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 7.0

The letter follows a clear progression: you introduce your purpose, describe your background, explain the support you hope to receive, and finish with a meeting suggestion. Paragraphing helps separate these stages, and links such as “Since” and “While” make the relationship between ideas easy to follow. The sequence is logical throughout. Some connections could be smoother, however: the sentence beginning “Since this is my first time…” is not a complete sentence, so the transition into your mentoring goals feels abrupt. The final suggestion also moves quickly from a proposed meeting to a group orientation. Joining the opening background more smoothly to the purpose, and clarifying how the meeting would work, would strengthen the flow further.

Lexical Resource: Band 7.0

You use a suitable range of workplace and technical vocabulary, including “fabrication,” “high precision and accuracy,” “nuclear codes,” and “theoretical knowledge.” These choices make your professional interests clear and show some flexibility beyond basic vocabulary. A few expressions are less natural or precise in this context: “give you a brief insight into my welding career” is an awkward way to introduce yourself, while “a local fabrication job” is vague. “Kickstart our introductory orientation” also sounds somewhat informal and unclear for a first meeting with a mentor. Aim for more natural collocations and precise descriptions of your previous role and the meeting’s purpose. Overall, the vocabulary communicates your meaning effectively, with occasional issues in phrasing and register.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 6.5

You attempt a mix of sentence forms, including longer sentences that explain your experience and goals, and your meaning is generally clear. Some grammatical errors remain. In “I am a hands on person and loves instant results,” the subject changes from “I” to “loves”; use “love” to maintain agreement. The sentence beginning “Since this is my first time working for a nuclear company” is a dependent clause presented as a sentence and needs to be joined to a main clause. The long sentence about your studies and work experience also joins several ideas with commas, so clearer sentence boundaries would improve control. These are noticeable but do not prevent understanding; more consistent agreement and complete, well-punctuated sentences would make the complex structures more secure.

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