Band 7.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 7.0 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-10-15

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

All new employees at your workplace have a mentor - an experienced colleague who gives them advice and support in their career. As a new employee, you have been given details of your mentor.

Write a letter to introduce yourself to your new mentor. In your letter

• give a brief outline of your previous studies and work experience

• explain what help you hope your mentor can give

• suggest arrangements for a first meeting with your mentor

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear....... ,

Student answer (Band 7.0)

Dear Jane,

I am writing to formally introduce myself as the new employee to the organisation.

I graduated with a distinction in bachelors of science, physiotherapy from Bowen university. I served as a volunteer with the Red Cross Society for five years as a part time Physiotherapist assistant during my undergradaute years. Furthermore, I have worked as a Physiotherapy intern at the Jos University Teaching Hospital for a year. I currently work as a Physiotherapist with this facility while spearheading a group of charity organisations, as a physical and mental health consultant.

I am pleased to be mentored by you and I am also hoping to learn some useful and important tips on how to navigate the early-career phase. I find it difficult to create a balance between the work and personal life.

I would like to set up a brief meeting next friday by 1pm, at the Cafe opposite the oiffice building if the arrangement is mutually convenient .

I look forward to hearing from you.

Yours sincerely,

Nanfah Sati.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 7.0

You address all three requested points and maintain a clear, appropriate purpose throughout. The study and work outline is specific, including your physiotherapy degree, Red Cross volunteering, hospital internship, and current role. You also identify a relevant area for support—balancing work and personal life—and propose a time and place for a first meeting. These details make the letter useful and personal. To strengthen the response further, explain more specifically what guidance you hope Jane will provide, such as advice on prioritising tasks or developing professionally. The meeting suggestion could also be made more flexible by offering an alternative time or asking when she is available.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 7.5

The letter is organised in a clear sequence: introduction, background, mentoring needs, meeting arrangements, and closing. Paragraphing supports this progression, and linking expressions such as “Furthermore” and “I currently work” help connect the career details. The purpose remains easy to follow, and the closing is appropriate. To make the flow more natural, reduce the density of the long career-background paragraph by separating past experience from your current responsibilities. The transition from your request for career guidance to the work-life balance concern could also be smoother, for example by explaining that this is one specific area where you would value advice. Overall, cohesion is effective, with only minor opportunities to make connections more fluid.

Lexical Resource: Band 6.5

You use a suitable range of professional vocabulary, including “distinction,” “volunteer,” “Physiotherapy intern,” “career phase,” and “consultant.” These choices communicate your background and goals clearly, and the tone is appropriately formal. There are also some inaccurate or awkward choices that limit precision: “the organisation” is less natural here than “the organisation’s team,” while “spearheading a group of charity organisations” is unclear about your role. Spelling slips such as “undergradaute” and “oiffice” also affect accuracy. Aim for more natural collocations and precise descriptions of responsibilities; this would build on the range already present and make the letter sound more polished.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 7.0

You use a mix of sentence forms, including complex structures such as “I served as a volunteer … for five years … during my undergraduate years” and “I currently work … while spearheading…”. Many sentences are clear and grammatically controlled, and the reader can follow your meaning throughout. A few errors and awkward constructions remain. In “a distinction in bachelors of science,” the article and degree phrasing need adjustment; “a distinction in a Bachelor of Science degree” would be clearer. The meeting sentence also needs more careful punctuation and phrasing: “next Friday at 1 p.m. at the café …, if convenient for you.” Check capitalisation of days and sentence-final punctuation, and review article use in formal descriptions.

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