Band 6.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.5 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-10-16

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

All new employees at your workplace have a mentor - an experienced colleague who gives them advice and support in their career. As a new employee, you have been given details of your mentor.

Write a letter to introduce yourself to your new mentor. In your letter

• give a brief outline of your previous studies and work experience

• explain what help you hope your mentor can give

• suggest arrangements for a first meeting with your mentor

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear....... ,

Student answer (Band 6.5)

Dear Sir/Madam,

My name is Ajibade Mariam. I am an alumni of Osun State University where I graduated with a first class degree in nursing science. I also got licensed to practice as a registered nurse and midwife, after passing the nursing council exam. Since my convocation in 2022, I have 4 years of clinical experience from reputable hospitals in Nigeria. I did the compulsory one-year internship and national youth service programme in Federal Medical Center, Lagos and Military Hospital, Port-Harcourt respectively, where I worked as a registered nurse under the supervision of nursing superiors. Afterwards, I worked in the labour and delivery unit of Randle Hospital for two years where i cared for women in labour, during delivery and in their postpartum period.

This is my first attempt at working in a non-clinical setting and I hope you would be of great help to me while I try navigating this new field of nursing.

I would like to request a meeting with you, so that I can get to know you better and get few tips from you.

Thank you for your help and I hope you consider my request.

Yours faithfully,

Mariam

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

You address all three requested points: you outline your nursing degree and clinical roles, explain that this is your first non-clinical position and that you want support navigating it, and request a meeting. The detailed account of your internship, service year and labour-and-delivery work gives the introduction useful context. However, the help you hope to receive remains general (“be of great help” and “few tips”), so the mentor has little indication of the specific guidance you need. The meeting suggestion is also incomplete: you do not propose a time, place or way to arrange it. Developing these two points with concrete examples would make the letter more fully purposeful.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.5

The letter is organised in a clear sequence: professional background, the support you hope for, and a meeting request, followed by a polite closing. Paragraphing helps the reader distinguish these functions, and the chronology signalled by “Since my convocation” and “Afterwards” makes your work history easy to follow. This meets the lower-band expectation of coherent overall arrangement and shows some of the clearer progression associated with a stronger performance. To make the progression more complete, connect the meeting request to a practical next step, such as asking when the mentor is available. The long first paragraph could also be divided or streamlined so that the key stages of your experience are easier to scan.

Lexical Resource: Band 7.0

You use a good range of relevant professional vocabulary, including “registered nurse,” “clinical experience,” “internship,” and “labour and delivery unit.” These terms communicate your background precisely, while phrases such as “non-clinical setting” show awareness of the workplace context. There are occasional word-choice or collocation issues: “an alumni” is not the natural form for one graduate, and “get few tips” needs an article or a different expression. “Nursing superiors” is understandable but less idiomatic than “senior nurses” or “nursing supervisors.” Overall, your vocabulary is sufficiently varied for flexibility, with some less common items used appropriately; refining these few expressions would make the letter sound more natural and professionally polished.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 7.0

You use a mix of simple and complex sentence forms, including the relative clause in “where I worked as a registered nurse” and the time clause “while I try navigating this new field.” Many sentences are clear and grammatically controlled, and errors do not prevent understanding. Some issues remain: “I am an alumni” has a number/agreement problem, and “Since my convocation in 2022, I have 4 years of clinical experience” uses an awkward tense construction for describing experience accumulated since a past date. The sentence beginning “I would like to request a meeting” also has a comma before “so” that is unnecessary here. Review singular/plural forms, tense choices with “since,” and punctuation around clauses to improve consistency.

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