Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-10-16

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

All new employees at your workplace have a mentor - an experienced colleague who gives them advice and support in their career. As a new employee, you have been given details of your mentor.

Write a letter to introduce yourself to your new mentor. In your letter

• give a brief outline of your previous studies and work experience

• explain what help you hope your mentor can give

• suggest arrangements for a first meeting with your mentor

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear....... ,

Student answer (Band 6.0)

Dear Mentor,

My name is Twinkle Jasrotia and I have joined your company as a new employee. I am eager to join your team and lead me as a mentor. I look forward to learning from your experience.

I tell you more about me as I completed my MBA in Technology, Innovation and Entrepreneur. I have some experience of working in a professional environment and with gaining knowledge I also developed my skills in communication , teamwork , leadership qualities and managing stress.

I want you to help me in a certain things so that I don't let you down. Guide me in understanding company policies and procedures. Help me to improve my communication skills and give me advice on handling workplace challenges. As you working here a long please share your experience and knwlodge and provide me feedback on my work performance.

I want to arrange a meeting with you can you tell me your availability . I can arrange a meeting to next week if possible . Can we meet in sa coffee shop so that no one disturb us . So which day and time suits you for meeting I am fully available.

Thankyou for your time and support. I look forward to hearing from you and meeting you .

Best Regards,

Twinkle Jasrotia

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.5

You address all three requested points: you outline your MBA and workplace experience, identify support you want with company procedures and workplace challenges, and ask about meeting next week. These details make the letter relevant and its purpose clear. The request for help is the most developed part, while your previous experience is described quite generally and the meeting proposal is not fully settled: “I am fully available” does not offer specific days or times. The opening and closing are appropriate, though “Dear Mentor” could be made more personal if you know the mentor’s name. To strengthen the response further, add one or two concrete details about your past role or studies and propose a specific meeting time.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.5

The letter has a clear overall arrangement, with separate paragraphs for your introduction, background, requested support, and meeting arrangements. This helps the reader follow your purpose, and the closing returns appropriately to your wish to meet. Some links between ideas are less smooth, however. For example, “I tell you more about me as…” does not clearly connect your introduction to your qualifications, and the long paragraph beginning “I want you to help me…” combines several requests without much internal organisation. The meeting questions also repeat the same point. Use clearer transitions and group related requests more deliberately; a concise sequence of proposed day, time, and place would make the final paragraph easier to follow.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use relevant workplace vocabulary, including “company policies and procedures,” “workplace challenges,” “communication skills,” and “work performance.” This gives you enough language to communicate the main purpose of the letter. However, several word choices and collocations are inaccurate or unnatural, such as “lead me as a mentor,” “in a certain things,” and “as you working here a long.” There are also spelling errors, including “knwlodge,” which reduce the impression of control. Aim for natural phrases such as “guide me in my role,” “a few things,” and “as you have worked here for a long time.” Proofreading spelling and choosing standard workplace collocations would make your message clearer and more professional.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple sentences and longer structures, and the reader can generally understand your intentions. However, control is uneven: several attempted complex sentences are faulty, as in “I want to arrange a meeting with you can you tell me your availability” and “As you working here a long please share your experience.” These need clearer sentence boundaries and complete verb forms. There are also errors in articles, prepositions, and sentence construction, for example “in sa coffee shop” and “I can arrange a meeting to next week.” Commas are sometimes placed incorrectly, and questions are not consistently punctuated. Practise forming complete clauses, using appropriate verb forms, and separating questions from statements; this will improve accuracy while preserving your willingness to use varied sentence patterns.

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