Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-10-20

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

All new employees at your workplace have a mentor - an experienced colleague who gives them advice and support in their career. As a new employee, you have been given details of your mentor.

Write a letter to introduce yourself to your new mentor. In your letter

• give a brief outline of your previous studies and work experience

• explain what help you hope your mentor can give

• suggest arrangements for a first meeting with your mentor

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear....... ,

Student answer (Band 6.0)

Dear Sir or Madam,

I am writing to express my gratitude for an opportunity to recieve mentorship from an experienced employee who will going give me gidelines and assistance in my career.

I have completed my Bachelors of Engineering from Gujarat Technological University, where I learned various subjects of programming and techonology. Previously, I worked as a web developer, where I have gained knowledge in programming language such as Java, Python, and MongoDB, which is currently in demand skills required in the job market.

I am joining your company as a data analyst, and seeking for an assistance in dealing with various projects. Firstly, I would like to know about the new workplace environment; my roles and responsibility as a new worker; company's requirement from an employee, and how to deal with international client as I know that this firm is dealing with multiple clients in overseas.

I am planning to have a meeting with you so that I can explain more about my career plan in deatil. I would appreciate your guidance regarding my career growth. If you are available on the after tommorow then we can meet in our conference room in the morning time.

I look forward to contributing to your organization.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.5

You address all three requested points: you outline your engineering degree and web-development experience, explain that you want guidance with workplace expectations and projects, and propose a meeting. The purpose is clear and the requests are relevant. The background and hoped-for support are reasonably specific, including your programming experience and interest in working with overseas clients. However, the meeting arrangement is less fully developed: “after tommorow” and “in the morning time” do not give a precise time, and you do not invite your mentor to suggest another option. The opening also sounds formal and generic for a letter to a named mentor. A more personal introduction and a clearer, flexible meeting proposal would make the response more complete and polished.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 7.0

The letter has a clear progression from introduction, to your background, to the support you hope to receive, and finally to a meeting proposal. Paragraphing helps the reader follow these distinct purposes, and linking expressions such as “Previously,” “Firstly,” and “so that” make relationships between ideas clear. The closing is also appropriate. Some lists, particularly the requests about the workplace, responsibilities, company expectations, and international clients, feel crowded into one sentence; clearer punctuation or separate sentences would improve readability. The transition from your career background to your new data-analyst role could also be smoother. Overall, the organisation is logical, but more flexible linking and cleaner presentation of grouped details would strengthen the flow.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use relevant vocabulary for the workplace and your professional background, including “mentorship,” “career growth,” “data analyst,” and “international client.” These choices communicate the main ideas, but several spelling, word-form, and collocation problems reduce precision: “recieve,” “guidelines,” “techonology,” and “deatil” contain spelling errors, while “seeking for an assistance” and “in demand skills” are not natural expressions. “Programming language” should also be plural when referring to Java and Python. Aim for accurate, natural combinations rather than adding formal-sounding words. For example, “support with my projects” and “skills that are in demand” would express your meaning more idiomatically and help demonstrate a more controlled range.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

You attempt both simple and more complex sentence forms, including the relative clause in “an experienced employee who…” and the purpose clause “so that I can explain…”. Most of the message remains understandable, but some grammatical errors affect accuracy. In the opening, “who will going give me” needs a correctly formed future construction, such as “who will give me.” Other examples include “I have completed my Bachelors” (possessive form), “I am joining … and seeking” (parallel structure), and “company’s requirement” (number agreement). The final conditional proposal, “If you are available on the after tommorow then…,” also needs a more accurate time expression and punctuation. Review verb forms, articles, agreement, and sentence boundaries to make your varied structures more reliable.

See this exact question answered at other band scores. The same prompt compared across bands.

Browse more IELTS Writing model answers or get your own writing scored by the same AI examiner.