Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-10-21

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

All new employees at your workplace have a mentor - an experienced colleague who gives them advice and support in their career. As a new employee, you have been given details of your mentor.

Write a letter to introduce yourself to your new mentor. In your letter

• give a brief outline of your previous studies and work experience

• explain what help you hope your mentor can give

• suggest arrangements for a first meeting with your mentor

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear....... ,

Student answer (Band 5.0)

Dear staff

I would like to introduce about a myself in between all the staff.

I have a lot of experience in my previous time and I studied a lot. in my previous company, I mostly work with the manager and I do a type of work and I can handle all the projects on the time. I never give them a chance of complaint.

I know all the things and all the work that I need to do in the office, but I need some preparation for that because I have was free at home for a long time and I just need to clear some basics about the work. It it will help too, increase the productivity in the work and beneficial for you.

I just want to discuss about some arrangements for the first meeting. For the first time, I just want to discuss with you when I can get confident to speak in front of others. add with this you can rectify my mistakes that I will never do in the future.

Thank you FaceTime

Best regards

John

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

You make an attempt to cover the requested topics: you mention previous work with a manager, say you want help with workplace basics and confidence, and refer to discussing a first meeting. However, the task is only partially addressed because key details are vague or missing. “I studied a lot” does not outline your studies, and “I do a type of work” gives little information about your experience. You also do not suggest a practical meeting arrangement, such as a day, time, or place. The purpose of the letter is not always clear, particularly in “introduce about a myself in between all the staff.” Give specific, relevant details for each bullet point and make your request to the mentor clear.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

The response has some organisation: it begins with an introduction, moves to your background and the support you want, and ends with a meeting-related paragraph and sign-off. Paragraph breaks help separate these topics. However, there is no clear overall progression within the paragraphs, and several ideas are joined in a confusing or repetitive way. For example, “I know all the things and all the work” is followed by needing “some preparation” and “clear some basics,” without explaining the relationship between these points. The meeting paragraph also combines confidence, correcting mistakes, and arrangements without proposing a specific plan. Use clearer topic sentences and link each idea to the purpose of the letter.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

Your vocabulary is limited and often repetitive, with frequent reliance on general words such as “work,” “things,” and “a lot.” Some phrases are difficult to interpret or do not fit the intended meaning, including “introduce about a myself,” “in between all the staff,” and “Thank you FaceTime.” These choices can make the reader unsure what you mean. You do communicate basic ideas about experience, productivity, and support, but need more precise workplace and mentoring vocabulary. Choose expressions that describe your actual duties and the help you want, such as “previous responsibilities,” “guidance on company procedures,” or “build confidence when speaking in meetings.” Check collocations and the meaning of phrases before using them.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

The letter relies mainly on simple sentence patterns, and attempts to combine ideas often contain errors that make reading difficult. Examples include “I would like to introduce about a myself,” “I mostly work with the manager,” and “I have was free at home for a long time.” These show problems with sentence construction, tense, and verb forms. There are also punctuation and sentence-boundary issues, such as the lowercase “in” after a full stop and the run-on sequence “It it will help too, increase the productivity.” Try building accurate simple sentences first, then add a few controlled complex sentences using “because,” “so,” or “which.” Proofread for verb tense and sentence boundaries.

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