Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-10-21

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

All new employees at your workplace have a mentor - an experienced colleague who gives them advice and support in their career. As a new employee, you have been given details of your mentor.

Write a letter to introduce yourself to your new mentor. In your letter

• give a brief outline of your previous studies and work experience

• explain what help you hope your mentor can give

• suggest arrangements for a first meeting with your mentor

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear....... ,

Student answer (Band 5.0)

Dear sir,

I am writing to express my interest to seek help from advisor who have experienced colleague. I hired recently and i have not great knowledge regarding their environment. Firstly, i introduce myself, my name is Gagandeep kaur and i completed my bechelor in non medical and i had one year experience as an accountant and my hobby is listen to music. Moreover, i want to assist from mentor reagarding collegues position because i hired here as an assitant. Therefore, it would more necessary about the performance of peers that is why i can distribute work according to their ability and background. Furthermore, i would arrange a meeting with senior staff after office hours on tuesday in italian restaurants.

I hope you would help me to familiar with all staffs and limitations of the company which would more beneficial for my work. we will met as soon as possible.

Yours faithfully,

Gagan

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You address the main purpose by introducing yourself, mentioning your studies and accounting experience, explaining that you want guidance in your assistant role, and proposing a meeting. However, some details are unclear or only briefly developed. For example, “help from advisor who have experienced colleague” does not clearly explain what support you expect, while the point about distributing work according to colleagues’ abilities needs a clearer link to your role. The meeting suggestion gives a day and venue, but “after office hours” is not a specific time and the restaurant choice may be less suitable for a workplace introduction. A clearer explanation of your career goals and a practical meeting arrangement would make the letter more complete.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

The letter follows a broadly sensible order: you introduce yourself, describe your background, explain the help you want, and suggest meeting. Linking expressions such as “Firstly,” “Moreover,” and “Furthermore” show an attempt to connect ideas. However, the progression is not consistently clear, and these transitions sometimes make the letter feel like a list rather than a connected message. The sentence beginning “Therefore” is difficult to follow because the relationship between your mentor’s advice and distributing work is not fully explained. The final request also repeats the idea of meeting without adding a clear next step. Use separate, purposeful paragraphs and connect each point directly to the mentor’s role.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some vocabulary relevant to the situation, including “work experience,” “mentor,” “performance,” and “background,” so the reader can identify the main topics. However, the range is limited and several noticeable word-choice, collocation, and spelling errors make parts of the message difficult to interpret. Phrases such as “seek help from advisor,” “assist from mentor,” and “familiar with all staffs” are not natural in this context. There are also spelling errors in “bechelor,” “reagarding,” and “assitant.” Aim to learn common workplace collocations and check spelling carefully; more precise wording would help you explain the support you need and sound appropriately professional.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and longer sentences, using connectors such as “because,” “that is why,” and “which.” However, the range is limited, and errors occur frequently in sentence structure, verb forms, agreement, articles, and punctuation. For instance, “who have experienced colleague” has an agreement and article problem, while “I hired recently” needs a passive form and an appropriate time expression. “We will met” also uses the wrong verb form. Some sentences combine several ideas without clear grammatical links, which makes the intended meaning harder to follow. Practise accurate basic sentence patterns first, then build longer sentences with one clear main clause and correctly formed supporting clauses.

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