Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-10-23

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

All new employees at your workplace have a mentor - an experienced colleague who gives them advice and support in their career. As a new employee, you have been given details of your mentor.

Write a letter to introduce yourself to your new mentor. In your letter

• give a brief outline of your previous studies and work experience

• explain what help you hope your mentor can give

• suggest arrangements for a first meeting with your mentor

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear....... ,

Student answer (Band 4.0)

dear Sir,

I hope you are doing well.I am writing a letter to you to inform myself.I am working as a new employee in your company.I have done my master degree from University Canada West.Apart from this,I have two years experience in Tech company.I have done work as

an editer.

I need your help in some area which will be difficult for me as I am new in the office.Like,what is important for

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 3.0

You begin in an appropriate letter format and include some relevant background: you mention a master’s degree from University Canada West and two years of experience at a technology company. However, the response addresses the task only minimally. Your request for help is unfinished (“what is important for”), and you do not explain what guidance you want from your mentor or suggest any arrangements for a first meeting. The introduction is also unclear in “inform myself,” which does not communicate your purpose naturally. The response is 77 words below the required minimum, leaving too little space to develop the three requested points. To improve, complete each point with specific details, such as a skill you want to develop and a proposed day, time, and place to meet.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0

There is a basic sequence: you greet the mentor, introduce your employment and education, mention work experience, and begin to ask for help. This gives the reader a general sense of the letter’s purpose. However, the ideas are not developed into a complete, coherent letter, and the final thought stops at “what is important for,” so the progression breaks off. The short, crowded paragraph also makes the information harder to follow. Use separate paragraphs for your background, the support you hope to receive, and meeting arrangements. Linking phrases such as “In addition” or “Regarding our first meeting” would help guide the reader, while completing each idea would make the connections clearer.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

You use a small set of relevant words to communicate your background, including “master degree,” “experience,” and “new employee.” These make the general subject understandable. However, the vocabulary is limited and some choices are inaccurate or unnatural for a professional letter. “Inform myself” does not express that you are introducing yourself, and “done work as an editer” is an awkward way to describe your role. “Tech company” is understandable but informal in this context. Aim for precise workplace language and accurate job titles, and use a wider range of terms to describe your studies, responsibilities, and development goals. This would make the letter clearer and more appropriately professional.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

The response mainly uses simple sentence patterns, such as “I am working as a new employee in your company” and “I have done my master degree.” There is an attempt to connect ideas with “as,” but the range of structures remains narrow, and several grammatical problems affect accuracy. For example, “I have done my master degree” needs a more suitable verb and article, while “I have two years experience” is missing a possessive form. Punctuation and spacing also need attention: “doing well.I” and “this,I” should have spaces after the full stop and comma. Practise accurate present-perfect forms, articles, and sentence boundaries, then vary sentence structures to explain your goals and meeting proposal.

See this exact question answered at other band scores. The same prompt compared across bands.

Browse more IELTS Writing model answers or get your own writing scored by the same AI examiner.