Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-10-24

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

All new employees at your workplace have a mentor - an experienced colleague who gives them advice and support in their career. As a new employee, you have been given details of your mentor.

Write a letter to introduce yourself to your new mentor. In your letter

• give a brief outline of your previous studies and work experience

• explain what help you hope your mentor can give

• suggest arrangements for a first meeting with your mentor

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear....... ,

Student answer (Band 5.5)

Dear sir/madam

Hope you are doing well.I am writing this letter to introduce myself. Actually, i am the new employee at the office and as you have appointed as a mentor. Hence you need to know about me.

First and formost i want to talk about my experience. i have one year of experince as a teacher in a secondary school.Moreover, i have worked for a buisness as a data analyst.However i dont experince in this interior buisness firm.

I have hoping to grow under your supervision. Apart from this, i have to learn the valuable skills of interior designing and to deal with experience. Although, my experience bit lower, i will work hardly under your mentorship.Moreover, we can schedule a meeting on monday to get to know each other very closely.Hence, we are going to work together

I apperciate you for spending your valuable time onto me.

Thank you

Best regards

Pooja

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You address the three main purposes: you mention previous work as a teacher and data analyst, say you hope to learn interior-design skills, and propose meeting on Monday. These details make the letter relevant and the reader can understand your basic intentions. However, the study background is missing, and the work experience is not clearly connected to your new role. The help you want is also expressed generally; for example, “grow under your supervision” could be supported with specific guidance you would value. The meeting suggestion needs practical detail, such as a time or place, and the opening “Dear sir/madam” does not reflect that you have been given a particular mentor’s details. Develop these points to address the task more fully.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The letter has a recognisable sequence: an introduction, a paragraph about experience, a paragraph about support and meeting arrangements, and a closing. This overall arrangement helps the reader follow your purpose. However, links between ideas are sometimes mechanical or unclear. “Hence” is used where the relationship is not logical, and “Moreover” appears repeatedly without adding a clear connection. The sentence “Although, my experience bit lower, i will work hardly under your mentorship” interrupts the flow because its meaning is difficult to follow. Use clearer paragraph development and connect each point directly to the task—for example, move from your background to the specific skills you hope to develop, then to a practical meeting proposal. Clearer referencing would also help explain who “we” refers to.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some vocabulary relevant to the workplace and mentoring, including “data analyst,” “supervision,” “valuable skills,” and “mentorship.” This gives the letter a suitable basic topic range. However, the range is limited, and several spelling and word-choice errors make the message less natural: “formost,” “experince,” “buisness,” and “apperciate.” Some phrases are also awkward or imprecise, such as “learn the valuable skills of interior designing and to deal with experience” and “work hardly.” These choices can make the reader pause to interpret your meaning. Aim for accurate, natural collocations and check spelling carefully; more precise phrases for the support you want would make the letter clearer and more professional.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt to combine ideas using clauses and linking words, and the main message is generally understandable. However, the range of sentence structures is limited, and errors occur frequently enough to affect clarity. For example, “as you have appointed as a mentor” is missing a grammatical subject or passive form, while “I have hoping” uses an incorrect verb form. In “Although, my experience bit lower,” the clause lacks a verb and the contrast is not correctly formed. Capitalisation and punctuation also need attention: “i” should be “I,” and several sentences run together after full stops. Practise accurate present and past forms, complete clauses, and sentence boundaries before adding more complex structures.

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