Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-10-25

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

All new employees at your workplace have a mentor - an experienced colleague who gives them advice and support in their career. As a new employee, you have been given details of your mentor.

Write a letter to introduce yourself to your new mentor. In your letter

• give a brief outline of your previous studies and work experience

• explain what help you hope your mentor can give

• suggest arrangements for a first meeting with your mentor

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear....... ,

Student answer (Band 6.0)

Dear Mr. Gonzales,

I am writing this letter to introduce myself as your new apprentice for the role of junior software developer. I hope that I can learn many things under your care.

As you may know I graduated at Philippine State College of Aeronatics with the degree of Aviation Information Technology. I have learned a lot of different kind of programing language that made my basic foundation great. Before we graduated we applied on different companies to have an experience on our degree on which being a developer, where we trained for about atleast four months to accomplish our last subject in college.

I hope that I can gain more knowledge and experience on working with you as my mentor on developing different kind of projects in the future. I would appreciate all the help that I can get on creating and leading the team with you.

I would likely to set an arrangement for our meeting next week on monday at 10:00 AM in the morning, in order to meet you properly as my new mentor for software developer.

Kind regards,

Julian Mari Kilayko

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.5

You address all three requested points and maintain an appropriate, polite tone. The opening identifies you as a new junior software developer, and the education and placement details provide relevant background. You also explain that you hope to gain knowledge and experience, and propose a specific time for a meeting. However, the help you want is not fully clear: “creating and leading the team with you” is difficult to interpret, and the request for guidance could be more specific, such as support with projects or adapting to the role. The meeting proposal is concrete, but offering an alternative time or asking whether Monday suits your mentor would make the arrangement more considerate and complete.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.5

The letter has a clear overall structure: introduction, background, expectations, and meeting arrangements are presented in separate paragraphs. This makes the purpose easy to follow, and phrases such as “As you may know” and “I hope” help connect the ideas. Some progression is less smooth within the background paragraph, where the account moves from studies to programming languages and then to workplace training in a long sentence. The final paragraph also repeats the purpose of meeting after already proposing a time. Use clearer links between the stages of your experience, and keep each sentence focused on one main point. A more direct closing question about the proposed time would also improve the flow.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use vocabulary relevant to the workplace and software development, including “junior software developer,” “programming language,” “foundation,” and “projects.” These choices communicate the general subject, but several phrases are inaccurate or unnatural, which limits precision: “new apprentice” does not fit as well as “new employee,” “under your care” sounds overly dependent, and “gain more knowledge and experience on working with you” is not idiomatic. There are also spelling and word-form issues, including “Aeronatics,” “programing,” and “atleast.” Aim for natural professional collocations such as “receive guidance,” “develop my skills,” and “gain experience working on projects.” This would make the letter sound more fluent and appropriately formal.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

You attempt both simple and more extended sentence forms, and the main message remains understandable. However, some grammatical errors affect accuracy and occasionally make relationships between ideas unclear. For example, “I graduated at Philippine State College” needs a different preposition and construction, while “different kind of programing language” has a number-agreement problem. The sentence beginning “Before we graduated we applied…” is difficult to control because several clauses are joined together; breaking it into shorter sentences would help. In the meeting paragraph, “I would likely to set” and “in order to meet you properly” show problems with verb patterns and sentence construction. Practise accurate past-tense descriptions and modal forms, and use a mix of shorter sentences and carefully built complex sentences.

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