Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-10-25

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

All new employees at your workplace have a mentor - an experienced colleague who gives them advice and support in their career. As a new employee, you have been given details of your mentor.

Write a letter to introduce yourself to your new mentor. In your letter

• give a brief outline of your previous studies and work experience

• explain what help you hope your mentor can give

• suggest arrangements for a first meeting with your mentor

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear....... ,

Student answer (Band 5.5)

Dear Sir,

I am writing this letter to inform you about my study and work experience. I would be grateful if you could guid me for my new work.

My name is Kishan Trivedi I from Delhi. I like, reading, learn new skill and languages. I had complitead my master in coomerce at APG University. I had worked 3 years as a accouner in JK company.

I am very hard working; I always complit my work. This is my new job place so, If you explain me what is the method of our company. Which is very crucial for me and if like there is some imortnat guidlance to give me it would be more convenient for me.

Athough I arrange our first meeting at Taj hotel, from morning breakfast to lunch all including. I hire meeting room instead of our office. moreover, I preaper presentation.

In anicipation for you response.

Yours Faithfully,

Kishan

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You cover the three requested points: you mention your commerce studies and three years as an accountant, ask for guidance about the company, and propose a first meeting. However, the help you want is described rather generally (“explain me what is the method of our company”), so the mentor has little detail about the support you need. The meeting proposal is also unusually elaborate and unclear: “from morning breakfast to lunch all including” does not specify a practical time or explain why a hotel meeting room is appropriate. A more direct, professional letter with a specific request—such as learning workplace procedures—and a simple suggested time and place would address the task more fully.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The letter has a recognisable sequence: introduction, background, request for support, and meeting arrangements. Paragraphing helps separate these topics, and phrases such as “I am writing” and “In anticipation” signal the purpose and closing. However, progression within paragraphs is sometimes difficult to follow. For example, “This is my new job place so, If you explain me…” runs several ideas together, while “Which is very crucial for me” is disconnected from the preceding sentence. The meeting paragraph also shifts abruptly from arranging a meeting to hiring a room and preparing a presentation. Use complete, clearly linked sentences and straightforward transitions so each paragraph develops one point.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some relevant workplace vocabulary, including “mentor,” “work experience,” “career,” and “meeting room,” and the reader can generally identify your intended message. However, the range is limited and several spelling and word-choice errors make parts difficult to understand, such as “accouner,” “imortnat guidlance,” and “preaper presentation.” Some expressions are also unnatural for a professional letter: “inform you about my study and work experience” and “what is the method of our company” would be clearer as “introduce myself and outline my background” and “how the company operates.” Check spelling carefully and learn common collocations for workplace communication to make your meaning more precise and natural.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple statements and longer sentences, but the range is limited and errors occur frequently, sometimes making relationships between ideas unclear. For example, “My name is Kishan Trivedi I from Delhi” lacks a linking verb and needs punctuation between the clauses. In “if you explain me what is the method,” the indirect question has incorrect word order and the verb pattern is faulty. Other examples include “I had worked 3 years” and the fragment “Which is very crucial for me.” Practise complete sentence structures, indirect questions (“could explain how…”), and consistent past-tense forms. Careful punctuation and checking each sentence for a subject and verb will improve accuracy.

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