Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-10-26

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

All new employees at your workplace have a mentor - an experienced colleague who gives them advice and support in their career. As a new employee, you have been given details of your mentor.

Write a letter to introduce yourself to your new mentor. In your letter

• give a brief outline of your previous studies and work experience

• explain what help you hope your mentor can give

• suggest arrangements for a first meeting with your mentor

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear....... ,

Student answer (Band 6.0)

Dear James,

I hope you are doing well. I'm the new employe in the IT departement. And I have been given details of you to be me my mentor.

My name is Lamia and I started working here last week. I have a good background in IT. I graduated from Harverd university with a computer science major. Then I have worked as an intern for six months which helps to gain a good work experience.

I would appreciate your help in introducing me to the team since I'm a bit introverte and did not make any contact since my arrival. Also, It will nice if you can show me arround beacuse I need to work with other departement and I get lost most of the time.

There a new cafe next to the company, they offer a great coffe with delicous cookies. Can we meet there after work? So I get to know you better.

Tell if this arrangement suit you. I can't wait to meet you,

Best wishes,

Lamia

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.5

You address all three requested points: you outline your computer science degree and internship, explain that you would value help meeting the team and finding your way around, and suggest meeting at a nearby café after work. The purpose and friendly relationship with your mentor are clear. The study and work details are relevant, though the internship is only briefly described, and the support you want could be more specific—for example, guidance on team procedures or your initial projects. The meeting proposal is clear, but offering a particular day or asking which time suits James would make the arrangement more complete. The response covers the task well overall, with some ideas less fully developed than others.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 7.0

The letter has a clear progression: introduction, background, requested support, and a proposed meeting. Separate paragraphs help the reader follow these stages, and the closing is appropriate for a friendly workplace letter. Connections such as “Then” and “since” make relationships between ideas understandable. Some transitions are less smooth: beginning a sentence with “And” after the opening, and moving directly from the request for help to the café suggestion, make the flow slightly abrupt. The final request, “Tell if this arrangement suit you,” also does not connect as naturally as it could. Overall, organisation is clear and cohesive devices are used effectively, though a few links could be more polished.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use enough vocabulary to communicate the main points, including relevant terms such as “computer science,” “intern,” “mentor,” and “introducing me to the team.” The friendly tone also suits the purpose of the letter. However, spelling and word-choice errors are noticeable, including “employe,” “departement,” “introverte,” “arround,” “beacuse,” and “delicous.” Some phrases are also awkward or imprecise, such as “details of you” and “make any contact.” These slips do not prevent the reader from understanding your message, but they reduce accuracy and naturalness. Check spelling carefully and learn common workplace collocations to make your vocabulary more precise and fluent.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

You use a mixture of simple sentences and longer clauses, for example, “I would appreciate your help in introducing me to the team since…” This gives the letter some structural variety, and the main message remains understandable. However, several grammatical errors occur in sentence construction and verb forms. “And I have been given details of you to be me my mentor” is not correctly formed; “There a new cafe” is missing a verb; and “It will nice if you can show me” needs a verb after “will.” The question “Tell if this arrangement suit you” also has an incorrect verb form and an incomplete construction. Work on complete clauses, modal patterns, and subject–verb agreement to improve accuracy while retaining your longer sentences.

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