Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-10-26

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

All new employees at your workplace have a mentor - an experienced colleague who gives them advice and support in their career. As a new employee, you have been given details of your mentor.

Write a letter to introduce yourself to your new mentor. In your letter

• give a brief outline of your previous studies and work experience

• explain what help you hope your mentor can give

• suggest arrangements for a first meeting with your mentor

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear....... ,

Student answer (Band 5.5)

Dear Mr. Sharma,

I hople this letter finds you well. I'm writing to inform you that I'm a new employees in this organisation and you are assigned as a menter for me. I would like to provide some information which is related to me and our first meeting.

I have recently completed my graducation from Aggoma university in Hunam resourse and Business management. Moreover, I have 2 years of experience in restaurant as a manager.

I would be greateful if you could help me to learn how to coordinate with customers and help me to get know about the work environment properly. Furthermore, when I come on my first day, please teach me where I have to go for my wrok.

I think, you would not require any special arrangements for our first meeting. However, I would appreciate it if you could give me enough time for clear my doubts which are related to my career growth in this company.

Thank you for taking the time to consider my request and suggestion regarding the arrangements. I look forward to hearing from you soon.

Yours sincerely,

Preet

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You address the three requested points: you mention your studies and two years as a restaurant manager, ask for help understanding customer coordination and the workplace, and refer to a first meeting. However, some details are unclear or only partly developed. For example, “when I come on my first day, please teach me where I have to go for my work” sounds more like a request for directions than a specific mentoring goal. The meeting arrangements are also vague: saying no special arrangements are needed does not suggest a time or place. Develop these points with a practical proposal, such as meeting during lunch on your first day, and explain more precisely what guidance you hope to receive.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.5

The letter has a clear overall arrangement: an introduction, a paragraph about your background, requests for support, and a polite closing. This makes the main purpose easy to follow. You also use linking expressions such as “Moreover,” “Furthermore,” and “However” to connect ideas. At times, though, these links feel mechanical or do not show a strong relationship between the points; “Furthermore” introduces a separate request rather than extending the previous idea. The first paragraph also combines your introduction and the purpose of the letter somewhat awkwardly. To make the progression more natural, give each task point a clear place and use simpler links or direct transitions between them.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

Your vocabulary is sufficient to communicate the main message, and phrases such as “work environment,” “career growth,” and “experience” suit the workplace context. However, spelling errors and imprecise word choices are noticeable and sometimes make the reader pause: “hople,” “menter,” “graducation,” and “wrok” are examples. Some expressions are also unnatural, including “get know about the work environment” and “enough time for clear my doubts.” Aim for accurate, natural collocations rather than adding formal-sounding phrases. Proofreading spelling and learning common workplace expressions will make your meaning clearer and help you express your requests more precisely.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

You use both simple sentences and attempts at longer structures, including “I would be grateful if you could help me…” and “I would appreciate it if you could…”. The overall meaning is generally understandable, but errors in sentence structure and grammatical forms remain. For example, “I’m a new employees” has a singular–plural mismatch, while “enough time for clear my doubts” needs a different grammatical pattern, such as “enough time to clarify my questions.” The sentence beginning “I think, you would not require…” also has unnecessary punctuation after “think.” Practise accurate noun agreement, infinitive patterns, and punctuation, then check each sentence for a complete and natural structure.

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