Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-10-27

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

All new employees at your workplace have a mentor - an experienced colleague who gives them advice and support in their career. As a new employee, you have been given details of your mentor.

Write a letter to introduce yourself to your new mentor. In your letter

• give a brief outline of your previous studies and work experience

• explain what help you hope your mentor can give

• suggest arrangements for a first meeting with your mentor

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear....... ,

Student answer (Band 5.0)

Dear Sir or Madam,

I just wanted to let you know that I have a degree in software development.I have worked under a local hospital for two years after my studies as a volunteer.Moreover, I also have some sample of college projects like gaming and apps.

In addition,I am more interested into gaming projects.In the office orientation, I got

to know that you have a degree in gaming software.So I am just looking forward of getting mentorship on the same field.

Futhermore,I booked your appointment for the next week and lookind forward to meet to face to face for the first time.I have already prepared the

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5

You include relevant information about your studies and experience, mentioning a software development degree, two years volunteering at a hospital, and college projects. You also explain that you are interested in gaming and hope to receive mentorship in that area. However, the response addresses the task only partially: the help you want is stated generally, and the meeting arrangement is incomplete and unclear. “I booked your appointment for the next week” does not establish a mutually agreed time or place, and the final sentence stops at “I have already prepared the”. The letter is also 44 words below the required minimum, leaving important details and development missing. Add a fuller introduction, specify the guidance you need, and propose a clear meeting time and location.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has a basic overall sequence: it introduces your background, moves to your interest in gaming, and then mentions a meeting. Paragraph breaks help distinguish these points, and connectors such as “Moreover,” “In addition,” and “Furthermore” signal transitions. However, progression is limited because the ideas are brief and the final paragraph ends abruptly, so the reader does not receive a complete meeting proposal. Some linking phrases feel mechanical, and the relationship between your college projects and your interest in gaming could be made clearer. Develop each point in a fuller paragraph and use transitions that show the specific connection between ideas, rather than relying mainly on introductory linking words.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use enough task-related vocabulary to communicate the main topics, including “degree,” “volunteer,” “college projects,” “gaming projects,” and “mentorship.” There is some attempt at more specific language, but several word choices and collocations are inaccurate or awkward, such as “worked under a local hospital,” “sample of college projects,” and “looking forward of getting mentorship.” Spelling errors in “Futhermore” and “lookind” also reduce accuracy. These issues do not prevent the reader from understanding your general meaning, but they make the letter less natural and precise. Build a wider range of workplace and career vocabulary, and check spelling and common word partnerships before submitting.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You communicate mainly through simple sentence patterns, with a few attempts to connect ideas using “after,” “Moreover,” and “So.” The basic meaning is usually understandable, but grammatical control is inconsistent. For example, “I have worked under a local hospital for two years after my studies as a volunteer” has an unclear structure, while “I am more interested into gaming projects” uses an incorrect preposition within the pattern. There are also punctuation and spacing problems, such as the missing space after “development.” and inconsistent paragraph formatting. The unfinished final sentence prevents the letter from ending as a complete grammatical unit. Practise accurate sentence patterns and review prepositions, articles, and punctuation; then add some controlled complex sentences.

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