Band 6.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.5 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-10-27

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

All new employees at your workplace have a mentor - an experienced colleague who gives them advice and support in their career. As a new employee, you have been given details of your mentor.

Write a letter to introduce yourself to your new mentor. In your letter

• give a brief outline of your previous studies and work experience

• explain what help you hope your mentor can give

• suggest arrangements for a first meeting with your mentor

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear....... ,

Student answer (Band 6.5)

Dear Mentor,

I hope your having a great time. Inroducing myself, my full name is, Akash Jadav and I just recently joined Torcad.Ltd as a Lab Technicican and I would work under your mentorship.

Elaborating my studies, I completed Masters in BIochemistry from University of Toronto last year. After that, I worked as a Research Assistant in the research lab at the university campus where I was responsible for biochemical analysis of environmental samples. Additionally, I was working with faculty members in their research projects.

Currently, I am working in Quality Control Lab, where I am operating HPLC and I am facing many difficulties while working with it. Therfore, I need your assistance to become proficeint in operating HPLC. Since I do not have any hands-on experience working with that instrument, I request you for a video call meeting regarding the basics of the instrument. Upcoming Monday any time between 10 AM and 12 PM works well for me. Please let me know if this schedule works for you as well.

I am waiting for your response.

Best regards,

Akash Jadav.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 7.0

You address all three points in the task: you outline your master’s degree and research-assistant experience, explain that you want help using HPLC, and propose a video call on Monday between 10 a.m. and noon. These details make the purpose of the letter clear, and the specific meeting window gives your mentor a practical starting point. The request for support is relevant, though it could be developed further by explaining what you hope to learn beyond the instrument’s basics, such as troubleshooting or quality-control procedures. The letter is appropriately framed as an introduction, but a brief line about your career goals or enthusiasm for joining the team would make the introduction more complete and the ideas more fully supported.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 7.0

The letter has a clear progression: introduction, education and previous work, current role and request, then a polite closing. Paragraphing helps the reader distinguish these stages, and transitions such as “After that,” “Additionally,” and “Currently” make the sequence easy to follow. The central request is also linked logically to your lack of hands-on experience. Some linking is a little mechanical, particularly the repeated use of introductory phrases such as “Elaborating my studies” and “Currently.” The opening sentence also moves quickly from greeting to self-introduction. A smoother transition into your background and a more direct connection between your current duties and the help you need would make the cohesion more flexible and natural.

Lexical Resource: Band 6.0

You use relevant workplace and scientific vocabulary, including “Research Assistant,” “biochemical analysis,” “environmental samples,” “Quality Control Lab,” and “HPLC.” This gives the letter useful specificity and shows an adequate range for the task. However, some word choices and collocations are inaccurate or unnatural: “I would work under your mentorship” is less direct than “I will be working with you,” and “request you for a video call meeting” is not idiomatic. There are also spelling errors in “Inroducing,” “Technicican,” “BIochemistry,” “Therfore,” and “proficeint.” These do not prevent understanding, but they reduce precision and polish. Proofreading spelling and choosing more natural professional phrases would strengthen your control of vocabulary.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 6.0

You use a mix of simple and more developed sentence forms, including the relative clause in “where I was responsible for biochemical analysis” and the time clause beginning “Since I do not have any hands-on experience.” Most of the message remains understandable, and the sequence of past study, previous work, and current duties is generally clear. Some grammatical errors remain, however. “I hope your having” should be “I hope you’re having,” and “my full name is, Akash Jadav” has incorrect punctuation. In “I completed Masters,” an article is needed before “master’s degree,” while “I am operating HPLC” would be more natural as “I operate an HPLC system.” Review contractions, articles, and punctuation, and vary sentence patterns while keeping them accurate.

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