Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-10-28

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

All new employees at your workplace have a mentor - an experienced colleague who gives them advice and support in their career. As a new employee, you have been given details of your mentor.

Write a letter to introduce yourself to your new mentor. In your letter

• give a brief outline of your previous studies and work experience

• explain what help you hope your mentor can give

• suggest arrangements for a first meeting with your mentor

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear....... ,

Student answer (Band 6.0)

Dear David,

I am Kai, as you might already known that I am the new onboraded co-worker in this company. I believe our management has arranged you as my mentor.

I am previourly worked as a sale supervisor in foodhall at Marks and Spencer, responsible for stock management, customer care, and staff training. I hope I can get more information about the upcoming meeting related about the company policy.

Regarding about the company policy, I wonder you could share more about the my current role posistion responsibility? such as which department under my care and also about the new manager inrollment training. As I am quite new to this new enrivonment, I hope you could share more about the company culture.

Addtionally, I would like to arrange a brief meeting with you in next Tuesday 13th October to discuss all these questions I have. If you have come out anything that will help me getting to the big family smoothly, please do not hesitate to let me know.

Best Regards

Kai

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

You address all three requested points: you introduce yourself, outline your previous role and responsibilities, explain the support you want, and propose a meeting time. The work history is relevant, and your requests about your current responsibilities, training, and company culture give David a useful sense of what you need. However, the study background is not mentioned, despite being requested, and the help you hope to receive is somewhat unclear where you refer to an “upcoming meeting related about the company policy.” The proposed date is specific, but offering an alternative or asking whether it suits David would make the arrangement more considerate. Developing these details more fully would make the letter more complete.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.5

The letter has a clear overall sequence: introduction, previous experience and requests for guidance, then a proposed meeting and closing. Paragraph breaks help distinguish these stages, and phrases such as “Additionally” signal a move to the final arrangement. This meets the lower-band expectation of coherent organisation and shows some control of progression. However, the second paragraph combines several different requests, and the repeated focus on company policy makes the relationship between the points less clear. “Regarding about the company policy” also creates an awkward transition rather than linking the ideas smoothly. Group your questions into a more focused paragraph and use simpler, more precise transitions to make the progression feel more natural.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use relevant workplace vocabulary, including “stock management,” “customer care,” “staff training,” “company culture,” and “mentor,” so the reader can understand the professional context. There are also attempts at more specific expressions, such as “current role position responsibility.” However, several inaccurate word choices, word forms, and spelling errors reduce precision: “onboraded,” “previourly,” “posistion,” and “enrivonment” are difficult to read, while “new manager enrollment training” does not clearly express the intended support. Some phrases are also unnatural, including “big family” for the workplace community. Proofread spelling and choose standard workplace collocations; this would make your meaning clearer and your vocabulary more controlled.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

You attempt both simple and more developed sentence forms, including the sentence beginning “As I am quite new…” and the conditional request “If you have…”. The overall meaning is generally recoverable, and the letter’s basic sentence structure is clear. Some grammatical errors remain, particularly in verb forms and sentence patterns: “as you might already known” should use “know,” and “I am previously worked” needs a different construction, such as “I previously worked.” The request “I wonder you could share” also needs a grammatical linking form, while “in next Tuesday” uses an incorrect preposition. Review verb tense, indirect questions, and prepositions in time expressions. More accurate control of these patterns would strengthen the letter without requiring more complicated sentences.

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