Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-10-28

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

All new employees at your workplace have a mentor - an experienced colleague who gives them advice and support in their career. As a new employee, you have been given details of your mentor.

Write a letter to introduce yourself to your new mentor. In your letter

• give a brief outline of your previous studies and work experience

• explain what help you hope your mentor can give

• suggest arrangements for a first meeting with your mentor

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear....... ,

Student answer (Band 5.0)

Dear sir Evans,

I am writing this letter to inform you that I am the new worker and you are the mentor that assign at me.Before anything else I want to introduce to you my recent lesson that i have taken is about welding and my last work that I have taken is welder.I hope that you could help me on how to weld perfectly that looks like the metal is already made on that form.I heard more about you and one of the details that I remembered about you is,you are the best in this company on metal works industry.I am looking forward that I can learn the skills that you have.In addition,on the day that when our first meeting is scheduled can you please talk to me as louder as you can because I have a lower hearing capacity,in that way I will hear you more clearly.I could promise you that I will follow all the instructions that you give to me for my fast adaptation of what should I learn from you.

Respectfully yours,

Jeffrey Lustado

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

You address the main purpose by introducing yourself, mentioning welding studies and work, explaining that you want to improve your welding, and referring to a first meeting. However, the background is very brief and does not clearly outline when or where you studied or worked. The help you request is also narrow: “help me on how to weld perfectly” could be expanded to include learning workplace procedures or developing your career. Most importantly, you do not actually suggest a time or arrangement for the meeting; instead, you ask your mentor to speak loudly. Develop each requested point more fully and make a clear, practical meeting proposal, such as suggesting a day and asking whether it suits.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

The letter follows a broadly understandable order: introduction, background, request for support, and a comment about meeting. However, it is presented as one long paragraph, so the different points are not clearly separated. Several transitions feel mechanical or do not establish a clear relationship, including “Before anything else,” “In addition,” and “I am looking forward that.” The sentence beginning “In addition, on the day that when our first meeting is scheduled” combines the meeting topic with your hearing request, making the purpose less direct. Use short paragraphs for your introduction and experience, your mentoring goals, and the meeting arrangements. Clearer links between these sections would make the progression easier to follow.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

Your vocabulary is sufficient to communicate the basic subject, with relevant terms such as “welding,” “mentor,” “instructions,” and “adaptation.” However, the range is limited, and several word choices or combinations are noticeably unnatural, which can make the reader pause. For example, “recent lesson that I have taken” is not a natural way to describe your studies, while “metal works industry” and “weld perfectly that looks like the metal is already made on that form” are unclear or imprecise. “Lower hearing capacity” is understandable but less natural than “hearing impairment” or “I have difficulty hearing.” Aim for precise workplace vocabulary and natural collocations, especially when describing your experience and the support you want.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt some longer sentences, but the response relies heavily on simple patterns, and errors are frequent enough to make parts difficult to read. For example, “you are the mentor that assign at me” has an incorrect verb form and sentence construction; “the day that when our first meeting is scheduled” combines incompatible structures; and “I am looking forward that I can learn” uses the wrong pattern after “look forward.” Capitalisation and punctuation also need attention, as in “i” and the missing space after the full stop in “me.Before.” Practise accurate sentence patterns such as “I look forward to learning from you” and “Could we meet on Tuesday afternoon?” Shorter, correctly punctuated sentences will improve clarity while you build control of complex forms.

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