Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-10-29

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

All new employees at your workplace have a mentor - an experienced colleague who gives them advice and support in their career. As a new employee, you have been given details of your mentor.

Write a letter to introduce yourself to your new mentor. In your letter

• give a brief outline of your previous studies and work experience

• explain what help you hope your mentor can give

• suggest arrangements for a first meeting with your mentor

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear....... ,

Student answer (Band 6.0)

Dear Mrs. Smith,

I am writing this letter to formally introduce myself as your new mentee.I am from the Philippines and I just moved here in Singapore since last week.I am a licensed early childhood educator and I have been teaching for 8 years already.This experience have equipped me enough knowledge to be an effective and efficient in handling diverse young learners in my classroom.

While having a significant amount of experience seems beneficial, I truly believe that I still have lots of things to learn from your institution. I would be very grateful to gain some insights particularly about the school practices,approaches and strategies that you use in the school. Additionally, I would also like to know about the learning resources and the grading system that you use.

Thank you for taking time to read this letter. I'm looking forward to meet you personally at your most convenient time and I hope to here from you soon.

Yours Faithfully,

Hannah

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You establish who you are and provide relevant background, including your Filipino origin, recent move to Singapore, and eight years as a licensed early childhood educator. You also explain the support you want, such as learning about school practices, teaching approaches, resources, and grading. However, the task asks for a brief outline of both studies and work experience, and your previous studies are not mentioned. The request for help is relevant but could be more specific about how your mentor might support your transition or professional development. Most importantly, you do not suggest an arrangement for a first meeting; saying you are available at the mentor’s convenience does not propose a time or format. Addressing these points would make the letter more complete.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The letter has a clear overall arrangement: an introduction and work background, a paragraph about the guidance you hope to receive, and a polite closing. This makes the purpose easy to follow. Linking phrases such as “Additionally” and “While” help connect ideas, although the latter introduces a contrast that is not fully developed. Some connections are also slightly mechanical, and the final paragraph moves directly from thanks to meeting arrangements without offering a concrete proposal. Improve progression by grouping your background details together, then explaining your priorities, and ending with a specific meeting suggestion and a clear invitation to reply.

Lexical Resource: Band 6.5

You use an adequate range of relevant workplace and education vocabulary, including “licensed early childhood educator,” “diverse young learners,” “school practices,” and “grading system.” Phrases such as “gain some insights” also show an attempt to use more formal language. At this level, meaning remains clear, but some choices are not fully natural or precise: “equipped me enough knowledge” and “effective and efficient in handling” are awkward combinations, while “here from you” is a spelling error for “hear from you.” The phrase “in the school” is also repetitive after “school practices.” Aim for more natural collocations and check commonly confused words to make your vocabulary more accurate and polished.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 6.0

You use a mix of simple and complex forms, including the subordinate clause “While having a significant amount of experience seems beneficial” and the relative clause “that you use.” Most sentences communicate your meaning, but some grammatical errors remain. In “This experience have equipped me,” the singular subject requires “has equipped”; “to be an effective and efficient in handling” has an incorrect article and structure; and “I’m looking forward to meet” should use a gerund after “looking forward to.” There are also missing spaces after full stops and commas, which affect punctuation control. Review subject–verb agreement, verb patterns, and sentence punctuation while retaining your varied sentence structures.

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