Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-10-29

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

All new employees at your workplace have a mentor - an experienced colleague who gives them advice and support in their career. As a new employee, you have been given details of your mentor.

Write a letter to introduce yourself to your new mentor. In your letter

• give a brief outline of your previous studies and work experience

• explain what help you hope your mentor can give

• suggest arrangements for a first meeting with your mentor

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear....... ,

Student answer (Band 5.5)

Dear Mentor,

subject: For an advice and supports

My name is Karan chaudhary ,I was writing a leeter for some information aboout my previous studies and work experience. After schooling i get an admission in university ( Maharishi University of Information Technology ) in 2022 for Bachlor of Pharmacy , after four years i get provisional degree for completing an entire course that is one of evidence of my study. And after this i join private hospital as an intern pharmacist in this i learn about how dispense medicine and use of them. In addition also learns about different type of diseases and there cause.

After doing six month intership , i will try to meet to mentor for some advises about starting an career as an trained pharmacist how can i join hospitals and other dispenseries. so that i try to arrange a meeting with my mentor so he/she at peaceful place, in this meeting i getting an idea or way to starts my career in the pharmaceautical sectors.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You cover the main purpose of the letter and include relevant information about your pharmacy studies and hospital internship. You also explain that you want guidance on beginning a pharmacist’s career and mention arranging a meeting. However, the task is only partly fulfilled because the meeting suggestion is vague: “at peaceful place” does not specify a time, location, or practical arrangement. The help you hope to receive is also not fully developed beyond asking how to join hospitals or dispensaries. A clearer introduction to your current role and more specific requests—such as advice on applications or professional development—would make the letter more complete and purposeful.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The information follows a broadly understandable order: you describe your education, then your internship, and finally your hopes for mentoring and a meeting. Linking phrases such as “After schooling,” “After doing six month intership,” and “In addition” help signal this sequence. However, the response is presented as one dense block, and the progression becomes difficult to follow in the long final sentence, which combines the meeting proposal with the hoped-for outcome. Some connections are also unclear, particularly “so that i try to arrange a meeting.” Use separate paragraphs for your background and your requests, and make each sentence express one main idea to improve the overall progression.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use vocabulary relevant to the topic, including “provisional degree,” “intern pharmacist,” “diseases,” and “career,” so the reader can identify your field and goals. There are also attempts to use more specific professional terms. However, the range is limited and several spelling, word-form, and collocation errors make parts of the letter harder to understand, such as “leeter,” “intership,” “dispenseries,” and “pharmaceautical sectors.” Phrases such as “an advice” and “starting an career” are not natural English. Build accuracy with common professional collocations and check spelling carefully; this will make your meaning clearer without requiring more complicated vocabulary.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt to connect ideas in longer sentences, for example when describing your degree and internship, but these complex structures are often faulty. Verb forms and tense shifts are frequent problems: “i get an admission,” “i join,” and “i learn” do not consistently express past events, while “i will try” is unclear after the internship has already been completed. Agreement and sentence construction also need attention, as in “also learns” and “how dispense medicine.” Punctuation and capitalisation are inconsistent, and several sentences run together. Practise forming clear past-tense sentences first, then add subordinate clauses only when their grammar is secure.

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