Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-10-31

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

All new employees at your workplace have a mentor - an experienced colleague who gives them advice and support in their career. As a new employee, you have been given details of your mentor.

Write a letter to introduce yourself to your new mentor. In your letter

• give a brief outline of your previous studies and work experience

• explain what help you hope your mentor can give

• suggest arrangements for a first meeting with your mentor

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear....... ,

Student answer (Band 5.5)

Dear....,

I am writing in regards of your mentee to give you information about myself, and knowledge gap in my competencies. I suggest you to have a meeting to discuus it further.

I joined this organisation recently. My manager told me that you will be my mentor during my probation period. I completed my Master degree In nursing from Holy Family Hospital. After completing my studies i completed my internshif from there. During this time, i have developed my theoretical and practical skills. I received a cerificate of appreciation from my Institute.

Although i have learnt alot of skills which are helpful for my better professional life, i still have to learn about effective communication and problom solving techniques. Moreover I am facing difficulty in managing a pressure during job hours. I have heard of your amazing communication and managment skills. It is a graet honour for me to work under your supervision.

I would suggest that we can arrange a short meeting to discuss t

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

You address the main purpose by introducing yourself, outlining your nursing studies and internship, and explaining that you want support with communication, problem-solving, and managing pressure. However, the task is only partly fulfilled because the first-meeting arrangement is not completed: the letter ends at “discuss t,” without proposing a time, place, or way to meet. Your request for help is relevant, but it would be clearer if you specified what guidance you hope to receive in these areas. The opening also refers to a “knowledge gap” rather than directly establishing a friendly introduction. Complete the meeting proposal and develop the requested support more specifically to make the letter more fully responsive.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has a generally understandable sequence: you introduce your situation, describe your education and experience, then explain the support you need before moving to a meeting. Paragraphing helps distinguish these stages, and linking expressions such as “Although” and “Moreover” show attempts to connect ideas. However, the progression is weakened by the abrupt ending, which leaves the final purpose incomplete. Some links are also mechanical or unclear; for example, “Although I have learnt…” is followed by a contrast that is understandable but could be expressed more directly. The opening combines several purposes in one sentence. Use a clearer paragraph for the meeting request and finish with a complete closing so the letter feels logically rounded.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use a relevant range of workplace and nursing vocabulary, including “probation period,” “theoretical and practical skills,” “effective communication,” and “problem solving.” These choices make your background and development needs clear. There are also noticeable spelling and word-choice errors, such as “internshif,” “cerificate,” “problom,” and “managment,” which reduce the accuracy and polish of the letter. Some collocations are awkward: “in regards of your mentee” and “managing a pressure” do not sound natural in this context. Aim for accurate, conventional phrases and proofread spelling. For example, “I am writing to introduce myself as your new mentee” is clearer and more natural than the current opening.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

You attempt both simple and more complex sentence forms, including “Although I have learnt…,” and the reader can generally follow your meaning. However, errors occur in sentence patterns, articles, capitalization, and punctuation. Examples include “I suggest you to have a meeting” (use “I suggest that we have a meeting”), “I completed my Master degree” (use “my master’s degree”), and “managing a pressure” (the article is not needed). The final sentence is incomplete, ending with “discuss t,” which prevents the reader from understanding the intended arrangement. Capitalization is inconsistent in “In” and “i.” Review verb patterns and articles, and ensure every sentence is complete before sending the letter.

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