Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-11-01

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

All new employees at your workplace have a mentor - an experienced colleague who gives them advice and support in their career. As a new employee, you have been given details of your mentor.

Write a letter to introduce yourself to your new mentor. In your letter

• give a brief outline of your previous studies and work experience

• explain what help you hope your mentor can give

• suggest arrangements for a first meeting with your mentor

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear....... ,

Student answer (Band 6.0)

Dear Sir or Madam,

I am writting this letter to introduce myself as i need mentor for my help at workplace.

Firstly i have good communication skills with broad knowledge of business. I completed my graduation around 5 years ago from Mohawk college, Hamilton in general business. Apart from that, I worked as a supervisor in walmart for 7 years. My duties were management of inventory and labour cost.

I am looking for your assistance because this place is new for me. I have many years of experience in same industry which can help me to adapt things quickly. However, i still need your help throughout my journey to learn about new workplace, programmes and your guidance.

I would like to arrange a meeting with you. This can give us a time to know about each other. I do not have any plans in the evenings and i think library can be a good option for venue.So, please let me know about your availability and place. Kindly contact me by email.

I look forward to hearing back from you soon.

Thank you for your support and understanding.

Yours Faithfully,

Simi

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.5

You address all three requirements: you outline your business studies and supervisory experience, explain that you want guidance as you adjust to the workplace, and propose a first meeting. The details about inventory and labour costs make your background relevant, and the purpose of the letter is clear. However, the help you hope to receive is described quite generally as support with “new workplace, programmes and your guidance”; specifying particular areas, such as learning procedures or setting career goals, would develop this point further. The meeting proposal is also incomplete because “in the evenings” and “library” are not tied to a specific day or time. A more direct, personalised opening would make the introduction feel more fully addressed to the mentor.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.5

The letter has a clear overall arrangement, with separate paragraphs for your background, the support you seek, and meeting arrangements. This makes the main points easy to locate, and transitions such as “Firstly,” “Apart from that,” and “However” help signal relationships between ideas. Some linking is mechanical, though, and the opening sentence does not lead smoothly into the first paragraph. Within the meeting paragraph, the shift from suggesting a meeting to saying you have no evening plans is not fully connected to a concrete proposal, while “this” in “This can give us a time” is slightly unclear. To strengthen progression, connect each detail directly to the purpose and offer a specific meeting option before asking about the mentor’s availability.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use enough workplace-related vocabulary to communicate your experience and needs, including “supervisor,” “inventory,” “labour cost,” and “assistance.” These choices show some range beyond basic everyday language. However, several expressions are imprecise or unnatural, such as “need mentor for my help,” “adapt things quickly,” and “learn about new workplace.” “Programmes” is also vague in this context, and “venue” sounds rather formal for a simple first meeting. Spelling and word-form slips, including “writting” and “labour cost,” reduce accuracy. Aim for natural collocations and precise terms—for example, describe how you can “settle into the role” and ask for guidance with “workplace procedures.”

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

You use a mixture of simple sentences and some longer structures, including “because this place is new for me” and “which can help me to adapt things quickly.” Most ideas remain understandable, but errors in sentence construction and punctuation are noticeable. For example, “I am writting this letter to introduce myself as i need mentor” needs a clearer clause structure and an article before “mentor”; “I completed my graduation around 5 years ago from Mohawk college” has an awkward grammatical pattern; and “I do not have any plans in the evenings” does not clearly express your intended availability. Capitalisation of “I” is inconsistent, and spaces after full stops are sometimes missing. Practise accurate articles, clause links, and punctuation while retaining varied sentence forms.

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