Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-11-02

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

All new employees at your workplace have a mentor - an experienced colleague who gives them advice and support in their career. As a new employee, you have been given details of your mentor.

Write a letter to introduce yourself to your new mentor. In your letter

• give a brief outline of your previous studies and work experience

• explain what help you hope your mentor can give

• suggest arrangements for a first meeting with your mentor

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear....... ,

Student answer (Band 5.0)

Dear mentor,

im writing this letter to introduce myself to you . Beside that im looking forward to receive advice regarding the job challlenges or seeking tips for improvements in performance.

To begin with , im johnathan from chicacho i have completed my masters in businesss and planning to do a job jn your company .Luckily i got selected in just 15 minutes of the interview.However im really willing to ask for help regarding the upcoming project which i suppose to handle alone.kindly refer me some advice or plan to co operate with the projecect as you are appointed for helping freshier staff.

Due to that reason im planning a dinner for two of us on saturday so we can breiefly introduce ourselves in that way i will get to know more about this workplce and future demandings.

yours sincerely ,

johnathan

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5

You make a relevant attempt to introduce yourself, mention your master’s studies, request support with an upcoming project, and suggest meeting for dinner on Saturday. However, the response only partially fulfils the task: your previous work experience is not described, and the help you want is expressed briefly rather than explained in detail. The proposed meeting also lacks practical arrangements such as a time or a question about your mentor’s availability. The letter is 142 words, so it falls short of the required 150-word minimum. Develop each bullet point more fully—for example, add a sentence about your previous role or experience and specify what guidance you need with the project.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The ideas appear in a generally sensible order: you introduce yourself, describe your studies and request support, then suggest a meeting. Connectors such as “To begin with” and “However” help signal movement between points. However, the response is presented as one dense paragraph, so the separate purposes of the letter are not easy to scan. Some links are also unclear: “Due to that reason” does not clearly connect the dinner suggestion to the preceding request for project advice, and the opening combines several purposes in one sentence. Use short paragraphs for your introduction, background and support needs, and meeting proposal, with more precise transitions between them.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some vocabulary relevant to the workplace, including “career,” “performance,” “upcoming project,” and “mentor,” so the reader can understand the general purpose of the letter. However, the range is limited, and several spelling and word-choice errors make the message less polished, such as “challlenges,” “projecect,” “freshier staff,” and “future demandings.” Some phrases are also unnatural, including “plan to co operate with the project” and “do a job in your company.” Choose more precise workplace expressions and check spelling carefully. For instance, you could refer to “support with the project” and “future responsibilities” to communicate your meaning more naturally.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt to combine ideas in longer sentences, for example when explaining your studies and asking for project advice, but control is inconsistent. Errors in sentence boundaries and punctuation occur throughout: “im johnathan from chicacho i have completed…” joins separate clauses without appropriate punctuation, while “However” is attached to the preceding sentence. Verb forms and sentence patterns are also faulty in “the upcoming project which i suppose to handle alone” and “im looking forward to receive advice.” Capitalisation and apostrophes are frequently missing, as in “im” and “johnathan.” These errors sometimes make the reader pause, although the main message remains understandable. Practise accurate sentence boundaries and common patterns such as “look forward to receiving” and “I am supposed to handle.”

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